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Iwritethepoems Junior Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 25 |
Canyon bells Can you hear them on the prairie just before twilight? Can you hear the passionless winds along the plains? Can you hear them? Fury bells. some call them fury bells. I call them canyon bells, Echoing existence from dust and sand. Freedom bells. Some call them freedom bells I call them canyon bells vibrating choirs at sunset and whispers before the heat of day. Canyon bells ring over charcoal fire chimes from the restless mind and heart. I call them canyon bells liberated from steeples where dreams became reality. Where sound gathered touch from wind to bring the tones to desert color. Canyon bells. the wind carries them, a thousand strong resonate your sojourn into the canyon there, you hear your voice see your vision loose your fury, stake your freedom and join in with the canyon bells. |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
The wind is every one of these and I think the whole idea of the atmosphere that you are in a way describing is truly dramatic . One of my most favourite things is whatching nature and the sheer brilliance of it, When this is incorporated into poetry, the results are amazing . Really enjoyed it . Thankyou . L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is fine, but the only thing that bothered me was the "passionless winds"...somehow, "passionate winds" would seem much more appropriate.... but I could view the imagery just fine! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
IWriteThePoems~ This had such a spiritual feel to it. Perhaps that is why it drew me back over and over again - 'Canyon bells. the wind carries them, a thousand strong resonate your sojourn into the canyon there, you hear your voice see your vision' Oh, I'm sure I've been there. And it calls me back - Thank you so very, very much for sharing this. Welcome to Passions. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very good. I enjoyed reading this! Welcome to Passions! Denise |
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Mr.Magoo Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 104 |
This took me back to a time when I went camping in Montana...Not sure why but it did. Just thought I`d share that...lol Very Nice write. Mr.Magoo |
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Rindercella Member
since 1999-11-12
Posts 64La La Land |
I think this is so pretty. You brought it to life for me. Enjoyed it a lot. *If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours* |
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Iwritethepoems Junior Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 25 |
Tommy: I am so glad you saw all of that in nature, that's what I wanted. thank you Sunshine: you're right I was going to use passionate, but it seems so common! But it is great, thank you. Marge: Yes, a spiritual feel is exactly what I wnted to relate. Thank you. Denise: Thank you. Mr. Magoo....seems everyone has been enjoying the great outdoors at one time or another, thank you! Rinderella: good! Thank you. |
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