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Sixteen and Full of Balloons
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Sixteen and Full of Balloons |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Sixteen and Full of Balloons She is sixteen and full of balloons She rides on her smile she has stopped traffic with her outstretched warmth I have just turned the corner She is laughter blooming hair brushed to crackle blue jeans and whispers bare feet on blacktop She is suntan and freckles long soft sweatshirts city street around her she is the lights My window just passed her caught in reflection handlebars and sneakers she caught my heart She is sixteen and full of balloons she is beginning |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Just beautiful. Sy |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
You have perfectly captured that moment between child and adult when we are ready to spread our wings and learn to fly. I love your imagery; you have painted such a vivid picture of the girl. "full of balloons" - that phrase says it all. Well done! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is lovely, Martie! Very lovely!  Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Sitting here smiling ..... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marge is sitting there smiling, but I'm grinning, because THIS is one experience one can't describe without having been there herself...full of balloons! You know I'm loving the whole image! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Perfect imagery - just perfect~S~ = love it |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy--Thanks for the beautiful. rascalx--Thank you so much for such a nice reply... Denise--thank you..as always. Marge--love that smile Karilea--I was there once and I saw her on the street just as sure as you please...and she was just like that. Bill--Perfect reply |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a wonderful description!!! Poised to fly, bright with color, not yet deflated with life... I love the pictures you share through your poems! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 01-25-2001).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Martie - come over here and sit down with me and let's write this elusive poem we are supposed to write heh... honestly my friend... I ADORE YOUR WRITING!!!!!!! You are my poetic click-person... K |
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