Open Poetry #12 |
Absence |
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Your absence a presence almost felt As I try to do things all by myself Tears on my pillow before I sleep Bury the memories, bury them deep! Don't know if the tears for you or for me Fragments of dreams, ancient history Tears on the bedding, tears on the floor Finding it hard to move out the door I look at the sky, no answers for me Rueing the time you let me go free Wishing and wanting the things I can't do Hoping and praying to again be with you Whisper to darkness "I'll give up the fight" "Just bury me deep, me cover with night" Oh! then the joy the astounding bliss! To find you waiting at the ending abyss. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry love, how amazing is this love, this is truly one of your utterly utterly best work. Truly absolutely wonderful dear heart Take care love, this is wonderful Slushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ You had me caught in sorrow's emotion - and then the beautiful ending. Well done, hon. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
M&M thank you both. be well Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Excellent work...loved the ending Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Frankie Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 57 |
Kethry - Liked lots - also loved the ending. Frankie |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh Keth--I feel it too...you did a beautiful job with this...the flow is excellent, and the sentiment is sweet. HUGS for you!!! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi Kethry, I too got caught-up in the weave of emotional heartache at beginning towards middle of poem and yet at the end a rainbow of joyful surprise... Lovely write sweetie *~coco~* |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Kethry, Wonderful write. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love the happy end....wonderful penned as always my friend. (((hugs))) Charisma |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
~Kethry~ You had me so sad and then the ending.. ..This was simply adorable..Thanks for the smile.. Hugs ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks poets each and every one this little poem, gave lots of fun 'twasn't hard to write ...not at all I called for my muse she came on the run if you read it again, I don't mean to cause trouble you may just find the ending is double. Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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