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Pestering Passion's Poets... AGAIN! (sequel)
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Pestering Passion's Poets... AGAIN! (sequel) |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
How is it that I’m realizing I’ve been somewhat sympathizing? I should have known what not to say And yet I did it anyway.  This doesn’t come as a surprise, Not in the wont of telling lies I’d like to voice a special vow, Bad thing is: I don’t know how!  So here’s a try to shed some light On my not so willing plight To explain the actions done, Explain my words to everyone.  I notice that some of you scorn The words I wrote, frustration-born. We all know not all agree Of our views of poetry.  I simply wrote a point of view Thought to express to all of you, The simple little thing I felt The pain I suffered that you dealt.  Don’t think I don’t know what you mean When telling me to write for me. But I’m a hungry, growing girl! I need some comments from the world!  I try to give what I receive Just as it’s supposed to be. The more I give the less I get… Am I angry? You can bet!  I write for me, you write for you, So here’s what we ought to do: If you like what a poem read Let them know what your heart said  About the work they labored on Before the poem is far gone Down the list, not to be read. Please tell them what you heart has said!  There I go again, you see? It’s always gotta be ‘bout me! Geez, I can’t believe my eyes! C’mon, ppl! Sympathize!  I’m not just a shallow brat So please do not call me that. I just don’t want to feel alone, I can do that on my own.  I need your help, that’s why I’m here So can’t some of you be a dear? Don’t forget, make nice replies And I’ll make sure nobody dies!  Ha! I’m sorry, it got away This silly humor of the day. In all honesty, I vow, Nasty comments I’ll not allow.  So lift those pens, prepare to write (Or if you would prefer to, type) Little comments, little things Imagine all the joy they bring!  Nothing lifts my spirits like A little note on this site And I’m sure that you’ll agree You share the same philosophy!  So c’mon, my poets, dear, Shout replies, let us hear! Thanks to you who left a note I really enjoy what you’ve wrote!  ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
WWWWOOOHOOOOOOOO!!! That is the thing that my heart was saying about this piece. Nicely written and I'm glad that you again shared your feelings. I just wish that my feelings would come out the same way. Love, Lady Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i think i missed the original (you say this is a sequel..?) but this one is good with me.. yes, we should try to take the time to respond..even its a short little "doreen 'wow!'" LOL i dont get a lot of time to read and respond..mostly i try to make sure to say my thank you's when someone replies to my poetry..but i know i like to get feedback on my poetry, so i'll try a little harder to read more so i can leave more responses... hugs, g "i was thinkin' if you were lonely maybe we could leave here and no one would know at least not to where we would think so..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening PoeticEnchantress, Ok, nice piece of writing about how you feel. So alright, I'll be a dear, and keep writing, and I'll keep reading. BC |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Yay! See? I knew you were all great ppl. And I've always believed that there was power in poetry! Write on, my friends! ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
I see it's not quite the hit the first was. *chuckles* It was an interesting experiment in any case. ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
well you know how sequels go (ex. the Empire Strikes Back, Godfather Two, Meatballs 2.) ehheeh love it too yuh you go and speak what i wanna say too |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Nice yet again, even nicer than the first, loved all the faces I didn't even gag even though I nearly choked just kidding haha.. smiles back at yah! |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
No one ever wants to see the sequel. It's automatically given the "not as good as the first" label. Thanks for readin' and bearin' with me, guys. It means more than you might imagine.~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
PoeticEnchantress, as sequel's go this one's a doozy so call me wicked or call me a floosie if after two I don't respond the first was quite funny, the second beyond I know that it hurts I know that it burns but that is the law of diminishing returns. Liked this one two write on Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
If you want to write poetry write from your own expression, not for anyone else. Write from yourself, not from anyone else and not FOR anything else. Then post it. Then if you receive a nice reply, acknowledge it. STudy the craft if you want to, enjoy it, read and take it all in. But if you are writing only for replies and attention you will not write for yourself and you will be doing yourself a disservice. Reply in kind to those you admire, respectifully and honestly and if you don't like one, I would say nothing unless it's in the critique forum. That's just an honest opinion. Kathleen |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
An honest opinion I believe I've stated thru the lines: 'I write for me, you write for you' as well as the stanza: 'Don’t think I don’t know what you mean When telling me to write for me. But I’m a hungry, growing girl! I need some comments from the world!' As you can see, i know this well. That wasn't the point. I guess you missed it. ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think you throw the cutest temper tantrums I've ever seen! This is adorable...and I'm trying, I'm trying!!!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I didn't miss it, I was simply trying to reinforce what you said here. Kathleen |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well, the sequel is as good as the first...and i dont know what to say actually(i guess thats why i reply less than i read)..but i guess i will leave my mark on this thread, proving that your emotions were heard and not ignored... write on! |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Thanx! I know that sometimes ppl don't have time to reply to poems. That's what I tried to express here, and keep it funny, of course. Not many of my poems have humor in them so I thought I'd stick to something different. ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
PE, I didn't answer on the first one because there wasn't room! I liked these 2 and can relate and I agree and disagree. That is just me and I will try to do better and answer all that I read! Hugs, ME |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
PE, me again. After I wrote this, I went to Passions#12 and started at the top and planned to read and answer each poem!! Well, I read and answered about 6 and haven't even put a dent in them!! I have to stop and fix dinner, so will have to start over and maybe forget about sleep tonight! It was a good idea, though. Thought you should know. ME |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Yes yes I like what you wrote and get a thrill when people comment upon my writes. I'll try to be more open and write what my heart feels when I read. |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
I have a confession to make... I've been really bad lately about reading and replying to poems. Mostly because I haven't had the time, what with my...um... family. Anywayz, I'm sorry and I'm trying, really I am. ME: Yes, good idea. I tried that once... never quite got finished, but I DID put a dent in it. Naturally, it was at one of the slower times of the day  Thanx all for your comments. I know you know what it's like. ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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