Title suggestions would be very WELCOME!

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Open Poetry #12

Title suggestions would be very WELCOME!

WinterTalon
Member

since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

0 posted 2001-01-21 06:15 PM

The setting sun
Casts a rainbow sheen
Upon the windswept valley
Blanketed by light snow
Such comfort…

I let the colors
Engulf my starved senses
As I cry out my agonizing grief
Lonely as the moonlight
I mourn myself.

Lifting up my
Tear-glazed eyes, I find
That there is much more to life.
I know I can move on.
I will survive.

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2001-01-21 06:25 PM

Poetic Enchantress,

Wonderful writing. Full of emotion and pain. I hope this helps you to purge it and move on. Here is my title suggestion . . . Awakening. For it seems you have found life has much to offer.

Welcome to Passions.

LW

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

WinterTalon
Member

since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

2 posted 2001-01-21 06:41 PM

Thank ya much, LW! That's an awesome suggestion. And yes, I've slowly come to the realization that life does have something worthwhile to look forward to...

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

3 posted 2001-01-21 06:49 PM

I have to say that I felt the second staza was the most powerful part for me. The entire piece is very good, but that part really grabbed me.

well done.

snwo

"...I am a river in winter,
quiet in the eyes of most
but deep,
swift and full of life
to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-01-21 07:49 PM

Seeing the New Sun. . .

this is wonderful. . . really well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

WinterTalon
Member

since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

5 posted 2001-01-21 07:58 PM

Thank you, S and S!

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

6 posted 2001-01-21 08:14 PM

This was written from the soul. Though short and full of rainbow colors, this verse has an impact. You write very emotionally.
Lovely
Liz

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