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Shall I Ask Him to Stay?
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Shall I Ask Him to Stay? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Shall I Ask Him to Stay? Is it you? Can it be? Who once broke my heart Tenderly begging for another start What can I say after all of the years How can I dismiss the sorrow and tears And yet, here we are, the two face to face Should I laugh or cry or warmly embrace? I need a moment to think where I’ve come The promises broken, the laughter undone A heartless goodbye still reels in my mind The manner in which you left me behind The sorrow was churning and burning my soul And left me unable to discover my whole And yet I remember the glorious days The love and the passion, your soft tender ways The hope and the dreams we set out to find The magical moments carved into time And now face to face, can I tell you the truth? I have loved you deeply since days of our youth Everything changes, and time doesn’t stop But my love wasn’t changed by the hands on a clock Should I turn you away, or ask you to stay? Will you hurt me again as you did on that day? You suddenly appear without even a call As though nothing happened between us at all So what shall I say and what shall I do As I stand here looking so deeply at you? Admit my love, or tell of my pain? This agony taunts me again and again I awake with the dream still fresh in my head Recurring fantasy haunting my bed I was talking to him, he was just here with me This is surely mental telepathy He must be thinking or dreaming of me For the dream was so real I still vividly see Now how should I end this one today Shall I turn him away, or beg him to stay? Elizabeth Santos |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
For now...he may stay...he will know when it's time to bid adieu... well done, Lady Santos... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Liz ... I don't think I could read any faster than that. I was wanting too much to find out how this turned out ... what an emotional roller coaster these words describe, beautifully written (now back I go for a slower read)!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ah...the questions we sometimes have to ask ourselves...and sometimes we're the only ones that know the answer ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, love~ There is only ONE answer if he should come your way ~ And I doubt you'd ever have to 'beg'~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
I really like this poem,,, it hits close to home. bernie< !signature--> [This message has been edited by bslicker (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Just tell him to hit the road, ya got Toerag, who could ask for anything more? |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Why must it be a stay or go situation? Why can't it be a maybe...let's play awhile and see if it's truth or moment? Anyway...wonderfully questioned, my friend. jwesley |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I hope everyone understands that this was just another dream, and the question is, how will I end it today. Dream or not, I still have you, Toerag. That's so comforting Thank you all for your kind remarks Liz |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Powerful piece, excellently crafted. Love the responses it conjured as well. Don't know much else to say...agree pretty much with jwesley, and Toerag made me LOL. But since it's a dream...let him stay, if he will. Those dreams can be awfully fickle. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--Time is forgiving as well as changing...and your dream may some day be real...opening doors is always a good thing, I think...I loved this poem! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hello Liz, I know exactly from where you write these words, and it is a very, very difficult decision to make. You have really brought out some of the feelings that I have. BC |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Dreams usually depict our deepest desires or most dreaded fears. This dream may contain a bit of both. I'm sure if it ever becomes a reality, you will know just what to do! Denise |
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Mr.Magoo Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 104 |
WOW! This is truely a powerful writing. I have no answers for your dreams. I know if it ever does come true,you`ll find the strength to make the right decision. Very Nice writing. Mr.Magoo I dont believe that following our hearts is always whats best for us. |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
I got that this was a dream, and your question for the day was what to do...go or stay. This was powerful, and kept me hooked all the way through. As always, I love your poetry. Marie~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
beautiful my friend. . . the dream always knows when to stay. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, It is an old question, to be or not to be. But it is always a new answer. Wonderful poem Love Sy |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
much enjoyed this one LIZ.. dreams .. there is no go or stay when it comes to dreams..they just are as they are.. hugs, g "i was thinkin' if you were lonely maybe we could leave here and no one would know at least not to the point where we would think so..." |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
If there's love in your heart even after all of those years shouldn't you at least give it a start, to know if it's still love for real or some fantasy feeling that isn't quite real only way to find out is to ask him to stay. Very nice poem |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Elizabeth, a thought provoking read you have shared here PoetFriend... I'm kinda like Kit I was speeding thru the poem as I too wanted to know the end so when I did finish it I went rite back up to re-read it at normal pace... Thank you for a most delightful read *~coco~* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This cowboy was completely enveloped in this write of yours my friend. I too had dreams like this for many many years. I now know the answer (to mine)but only you can answer yours. I hope your answer is turns out more positive than mine did. Somehow knowing the size of your heart and the way that you so clearly see things, I don't think you will have a problem finding the right answer for you. Superb write as always. |
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Frankie Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 57 |
Elizabeth - I enjoyed this one very much - Personally, I would take a chance and ask him to stay. Frankie |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I remember so vividly - when I was in your shoes - some 11 years ago. we'd been a loving couple - out of the blue - she disappeared - married - within a few months we met again - she divorced - he was a drunk - we dated a few months - and I "turned her away". and will always wonder if she might not have STILL been the best choice - Follow your heart - its's a tough choice. |
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