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Living A Dream |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
OK, this is my first EVER attempt at a rhyming poem. So, here goes-- Walking beside you along the shore; Crashing near our feet, the waves of the ocean. I can only imagine what is in store, But your perfect love has sent me a notion. You glanced down briefly and took my hand, My heart instantly skipped a beat. You have but one demand; I am positive your need I will meet. You lifted my face to yours And gave me love's most passionate kiss. I sensed the opening of a thousand doors Through which I'll forever enter and reminisce. You held me gently in your arms As we watched a sailboat in the distance. So wrapped up in your charms, Your heart will be my only existence. So, my dear love, This heart forever belongs to you. Your soul I will be a part of Until the day my life is through. I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
A wonderful poem and i would never know it was your first rhyming poem.. nicely done snowpants..  ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ Delightfully done ! More ! More ! More !  You write well in many forms. Nice to see the s t r e t c h ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is truly beautiful...wonderful first attempt |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Victoria: why thank you! that means a lot to me! Marge: well, I am definitely flattered by your kind words! thank you so much! Paula: thank you too! I appreciate your reply! sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
SP~ this is SO beautiful!! I think this is a perfect style for you...... -SEA |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You know.......I knew you could put one to paper that rhymes and you just did it in class and style with a beautifully romantic and tender creation. I applaud you and now maybe it is not to soon to be thinking of what will rhyme with "Cardinals" |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
SEA: wow! perfect?? thank you so much! I really appreciate that! Mark: well thank you kindly, my dear friend, for those extremely encouraging words! wow, I didn't expect such great replies with this, but it's cool anyway! and, ahem, I truly don't think I'm the one with the worries. But, don't fret, there are LOTS of words that rhyme with Mets! If you want a challenge, you can find one to rhyme with Ventura! That's even better! Well, your choice, m'friend.  sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
kris, this was as beautiful this time around as when i first had the honor of being able to read it. as marge said you my friend write eloquently in many differnet forms. keep up the great work and i of course will continue on being a faithful fan take care ~~~~~~ aim |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Awww, thanks, Aim!! It is an honor to have you as a fan and a friend! Thank you so much!! -e ~~~~ I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Snowpants--Wonderful writing. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister "It is our business to go as we are impelled." ~ D.H. Lawrence |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Thanks, Poeminister! I'm glad you could stop by!! sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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