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Learner's Permit New Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 9Australia |
Me feeling jealous, she is a friend Yes only a friend But once upon a time I love this friend We were lovers as if forever Only until one day everything shattered into a thousand of pieces That is not easy to put back together Why should I feel such jealously? I cannot imagine her being in the arms of another guy That could have been mine, what have I done wrong Deep inside me, I still love her I have one last wish, a wish to put things back together --------- I have no experience writing poems (check my nickname), comments and suggestions will be greatly appericated  Thanks |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
if you wanna know what people think you might submit this in the Critical Analysis Forum. I say it has meaning and i can feel what you arte saying yuh and its good to see you here come often stay late. Welcome to Passions! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a neat pseudonym...and a good entrance into this new home of Passions! Welcome, and check your e-mail for a special greeting! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LP~ WELCOME! I liked this very much....I can understand your feelings very clearly, I think you've made a wonderful entrance to Passions! -SEA |
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Learner's Permit New Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 9Australia |
Thanks fot the warm welcome ) I have been around netpoet for quite sometime, didn't join the forum until this morning.Posted the poem in the recommended forum. Its almost 4.30am here, I gotta dive into my bed and have some sweet dreams haha |
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Frankie Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 57 |
Learners - Welcome, I am a new poster as well.....anytime you feel unsure about your own writing, take a look and mine and I'm sure you'll feel a lot better..... Frankie |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Welcome to our world and forgive me for being so late doing it...every poet has his own style and every poet has something to give...this says so much and I like it...and Frankie? theres NOTHING wrong with how you write either |
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