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ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2001-03-24 03:34 PM

It's not that I can't finish this piece it's just that I don't want to. I want you to add a verse and see where we can go with it. Remember just one verse!
Aw c'mon show me what you can do!!

LOST IN SIGHT

I found you in a sea so dark and deep
lost in shadows of night thrills.
I could see that as you gathered grief
you were headed for a spill.

Your eyes were jaded emeralds harsh
from fears you tried to hide.
But I knew inside that soul gone stark
was a heart I could revive.

The nights were timeless hiding truth
in the vacant rooms of gold.
And in the street sense ways of youth
you'd let your values go.

Lost in a nightlife trading worth
where a lovelight never burns
You stood with souls of bitter work
to feel the worst you'd learned

and.............................

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2001-03-24 03:38 PM

ethome -
I saw you in the darkness of night,
but radiant you were, in the moonlight..
Touching closer, warmth of two,
Only wanting to know, the breath of you..

BC

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

2 posted 2001-03-24 03:42 PM

but bitter still, hollow inside
you learned to trust and then
I came along to give you pride
to learn the ways of men

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2001-03-24 04:15 PM

He he right on! Thanks you two!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-03-24 04:20 PM

when suddenly by a touch
of silent, invisible hand
came to light the nature of
a truly loving man

the grief faded from your eyes
you walked away from hollow night
and in a piece of peace you found
you walked on toward the light

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

5 posted 2001-03-24 04:59 PM

and suddenly, I knew just why
I'd found you standing there.
It was because you needed me
and all my love to share.

Betty Lou Hebert

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2001-03-24 05:01 PM

Yes yes Sunshine and Betty!

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

7 posted 2001-03-25 02:02 AM

You walk the empty streets of dreams
In silence set with shame
Lost in the label others scream
Trying to place the blame

Your fears to real in your mind
The pain you cannot hide
You search for a future you cant seem to find
On these streets where death resides

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2001-03-25 07:43 AM

Ethome, get yourself over to #13 and do this again!

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