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First Kiss
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First Kiss |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
First Kiss Then, a car's front seat was called a bench. A sort of giant slide rule, it meant You could calculate your progress with a girl By measuring the distance interval. I had a friend, keen on science, Who spent hours attempting to insert Arm length into the equation. I didn't have the math for that. Instead I confronted the vast, expanding silence By observing the lights twinkling in the distance. Once, in shyness, I commented On the origin of the universe. She didn't mind, cautious as I was Not to mention the "BIG BANG" theory, The proof of which would long escape me. In truth, we relied on radio; Soft, warm, central; its dial a glow Much like an ember. We watched it so, More than each other, until one night The battery ran low. Then our eyes took charge. RMW |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
Loved...I mean...I mean...loved this! Filled with nostalgia, innocence...hinting at what would be (...then our eyes took charge)...this is truely great writing. I loved the idea...measuring the distance on the bench as an indication of your progress with a girl... Jellybean King |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Dear Jellybean, I have a close friend who's mania for Ju-Ju Bees (sp?) warrants his adopting the name. Being equally kind, I wonder if you are related. I look forward to enjoying more of YOUR work. I'm told you have a way. Thanks again. Bob |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
How about those drive in movies? Good nostalgic write! Deb |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Deb, Drive-in movies? You are absolutely right. But then, I went to an all-boys high school. So what do I know. Chuckle. Bob |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
How completely adorable. Gosh does that bring back memories!  "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
I remember mines after reading it. Thanx with a little sorry for giving new idea to right my own on this topic. I love to nice poetry. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I wonder if teens today ever look into one another's eyes, probably do most of their flirting through a screen like this one! You're a great addition to this forum, keep 'em coming! Corinne |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Just A Woman .... as we were properly introduced quite some time ago I must tell you, and all others who happen to attend this message, that I take exception to your new name. It shouts contradiction. It's like saying, "just a Marine". (Smiling). Nice to be in your company again. Waseem.....Thank you for commenting, Waseem. And I am especially pleased to make the acquaintance of someone from Pakistan. Being here makes me feel like .... Sean Connery (I wish)....I've seen Canada, the UK, and now, Pakistan. Greetings. Corinne, I don't believe it! The youth of America technologically winking their way (;;;  through teendom and never once slipping a false eyelash or losing a contact lense? What fun is that? Thank you for the encouragement.Bob |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
*smiling at Bob* I'm just thrilled to be the one who knew you first! LOL "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, Bob, oh, Bob...I must copy and save this, pretty please! Oh, it almost makes me want to go back to being a teen again...and that's something I've vehemently said I'd never want to relive. Adoslesence, shudder! I hope you submit this poem somewhere...it's a money maker! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
MMMMM yes what sweet remembrance...although I have to admit...it wasnt the front seat of a car...it was the passenger seat of a motorcycle...very nice Bob... |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Ah that first kiss, great write Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
RMW - a'hhhh, first kiss, I believe it was on a ferris wheel, in the moonlight. Nice write. BC |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
All boys school, or not, Bob, you've got this routine down pat! Wonderful piece, I loved it. (did I say piece?) KateBlessings Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent Bob. . . too many memories in this one!! ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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tradewind Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 101 |
this whole poem made me smile... a great story, and the "BIG BANG" line was very good! it was a pleasure to read this |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Paula....chuckle. VAS......I "shudder" too. Moon Dust .... Thank you for the "ah" that refreshes. Sven .... Thank you Sir. Tradewind .... Love your name, and thanks much. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
PS .... Bill, a ferris wheel...now THAT is romantic. Sounds like "April Love." Katherine...yes, you said "piece"..or did you mean "peace"....(am I in trouble already?...smiling) |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
For a moment there, I was 16 in front seat of a yellow and blue oldsmobile with Ron, a lake and a green glowing dial. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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