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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Rationed Night. And a gray harbor, thick with ships. Dark, squat hulls, "still cold," she guessed, From the feel of the North Atlantic Ice. And "such a bother," then she thought, "This ghastly heat, and those U-Boats Prowling just off the coast And making it all so very difficult To keep good help." Right then she missed most Her father's way of always getting One of the servants to stay late To fetch a block of ice from the back porch. "Small price," she pouted, Her elbows placed to prop her chin, Her eyes closed, summoning The tingle of a northern breeze Sliding over a cubic surface Before dropping into her cleavage. "Useless." Bored, she looked back out to sea To the dreary little Liberty ships Tightly packed with who knows what Except that it all was rationed, "And men," she thought. "Stokers" Was a word she'd heard the newsreels use When describing sailors. "Oily types," they seemed to be. "Soiled and partly naked men, their arms and backs Rippling swells" she could almost feel .... And her breath caught As the hot light of an explosion Muscled on the horizon. RMW |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
"Soiled and partly naked men, their arms and backs Rippling swells" she could almost feel .... And her breath caught As the hot light of an explosion Muscled on the horizon." Very nicely done. I can just imagine that explosion. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you for the appreciation. The American merchant marine suffered terribly in the Atlantic during the pre-Pearl Harbor period. Un-sung heroes. Again, thank you for the comments. Bob |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Vivid and the same section stood out for me as did for Inot2B. That was powerful in your imaging and the emotion that it evoked. Have you ever sent this in to the Portland Oregonian Poetry section? It's worth an attempt, I think. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thanks much Virginia. You have always been so supportive. No, have not submitted anything of late...no...I take that back. The Portland Review may be working up a few pink slips to send to me. No way to treat the alumni. Bob |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is excellemnt writing Bob! Reminds me of the Halifax explosion in Nova Scotia Canada......I love the creative delivery of the preset atmosphere before the violent end...just great writing! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent. . . a moment in time captured. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Ethome, New Brunswick....Nova Scotia....fishing grounds. Ah, the sea. Thanks Ethome. Appreciate that. Sven, Thank you for the suggestion of a "Kodak moment". To tell the truth, I'm not entirely sure which way the camera was pointed. Smiling. Bob |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting....James |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
James...thank you. Hawaii. Gosh, isn't anybody here from average hometown USA. I'm getting a complex. Bob |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I enjoyed reading thisto the end. Thank you Joyce |
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