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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again

0 posted 2001-03-21 08:45 PM



*hey all. i've been away for... well quite sometime. things look the same (and better) around here. i'm loving all the new faces. i wish i coulda welcomed you all, so WELCOME apologies for my abscence. i was moving and also...i was making progress in life. having these revalations, learning these strange lessons. i only say strange because they're the ones we all know, but never acknowledge... anyways, i'm not as ... let's just say "dark"... as i used to be. that's affected my writing. (in that i haven't been able to come up with anything!) so here's my first feeble attempt at love life poetry hehehe. my coming out piece. it's also a sequel to one i wrote a while ago. enjoy.*

*it's not raining anymore*


i crawl out from the corner
Slowly rising to my feet.
Please don't shine light in my eyes
Please don't come in after me
The cuts along these broken arms
The scars along this beating heart
Not one more burn of fiery touch...
You kiss me with your flame.

We step across the broken glass
i'm barefoot and i bleed.
The corners of my mind are cold,
your touch is so warm to me.
You melt away my hardened mask
when i hear you smile and brightly laugh
Open me up; You give so much
and i don't even know your name...

If you sing, then we can dance...
'cause i'm not crying anymore.
i'll hold you high, just hold me tight...
No, i'm not dying anymore.
Paint me a smile and hold my hand
i won't run; i'll make my stand
No black balloons or broken mirrors
'cause it's not raining anymore.

i'm not thinkin 'bout tomorrow
you just spin me 'round and 'round
Take my hand and i will lead us,
and i will make forever Now.
No words could ever say it all
No hurt could ever break the fall
Being burned from inside out
never felt this way before.

If you sing, then we can dance...
'cause i'm not crying anymore.
i'll hold you high, just hold me tight...
No, i'm not dying anymore.
Paint me a smile and hold my hand
i won't run; i'll make my stand
No black balloons or broken mirrors
'cause it's not raining anymore.

The light you shine, it burns my eyes.
You won't let go, i don't know why
No, i don't know why you're choosing me...
but you make me wanna be
the man inside you see

If you sing, then we can dance...
'cause i'm not crying anymore.
i'll hold you high, just hold me tight...
No, i'm not dying anymore.
Paint me a smile and hold my hand
i won't run; i'll make my stand
No black balloons or broken mirrors
'cause it's not raining anymore.

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.
- Frank Sinatra

"It don't mean a thing
if it ain't got that swing."

© Copyright 2001 Ethan Halo - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-03-21 08:48 PM


Aha...we won't let go because we love you! Ethan! You're home! Finally....it's been a long, long time indeed...


sans38
Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 117
Westland, Michigan
2 posted 2001-03-21 08:52 PM


This was wonderful!
Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2001-03-21 08:53 PM


Superb Ethan!!!! Welcome back btw, you've been missed. . .

More!!!

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-03-21 09:10 PM


i crawl out from the corner
Slowly rising to my feet.
Please don't shine light in my eyes
Please don't come in after me
The cuts along these broken arms
The scars along this beating heart
Not one more burn of fiery touch...
You kiss me with your flame.

We step across the broken glass
i'm barefoot and i bleed.
The corners of my mind are cold,
your touch is so warm to me.
You melt away my hardened mask
when i hear you smile and brightly laugh
Open me up; You give so much
and i don't even know your name...

If you sing, then we can dance...
'cause i'm not crying anymore.
i'll hold you high, just hold me tight...
No, i'm not dying anymore.
Paint me a smile and hold my hand
i won't run; i'll make my stand
No black balloons or broken mirrors
'cause it's not raining anymore.

=========================
No words could ever say it all
No hurt could ever break the fall
Being burned from inside out
never felt this way before.

=====================
No, i don't know why you're choosing me...
but you make me wanna be
the man inside you see
======================

*smiling BIG TIME* ...
HEY YOU!!!!!!!!

Ethan baby... you're singing a song of way cool here....
wonderful writing of anticipation and self discovery....
and Im digging your rhyme scheme too ...
Most of all diggin seeing your name here and reading where ya say things are going good for ya...
Welcome back groovy gator
you have been missed.

~~~~~~~~~~~

"If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home
There's an awful lot of breathing room
But I can hardly move
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
cuz there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you"

~MB20~

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
5 posted 2001-03-21 09:47 PM


thank you all so much for the kind critiques. *glad ya remember me!* j/k

JM- you spoil me so, darlin.

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.
- Frank Sinatra

"It don't mean a thing
if it ain't got that swing."

Nate Dogg
Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
6 posted 2001-03-21 11:05 PM


This is a lovely verse....wonderful work!!

Nathan

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2001-03-22 01:26 AM


Wecome back Ethan...you have been sorely missed...lessons kinda suck huh? But its nice to see you coming in out of the rain...HUGS!!!!
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