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A Slide Of Thought
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A Slide Of Thought |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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A Slide Of Thought I fell through each step along the way catching heat inside my dreams, twisting voices into song. I skinned myself with hollowed wood and screamed for comprehension. I was dismissed with laughter. I was confronted first hand with your doubt. Not a shade of gray could represent, not a slide of thought explain. And I could have placed the words on paper plates and set them on fire to burn, or I could have sung them by the doorway while you slept. Either way they would have traveled, either way they would have felt. But instead I took the denim and followed, I took the beaten white display of you and delved. Skipping anger into forests, thrusting love unto the trees - wishing days would circle hunger accept the danger in it's wings,...and release. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is absolutely incredible. . . I'm really amazed with this one. . . it's excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Hey you!! You deserve the release, my friend. You truly do. This was awesome work!! I love seeing you here. Take care.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Visible Fire The heat was burning Each word I was learning Spoken through flames Touching games Invisible Fire appears Burning bright without fears Pretty colours of heat A sugar flame treat |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
beautiful...i felt like i was spinning on one of those merrygoround things at the park but focusing on these words as i read this... man, that was POETRY! You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I fell through each step along the way catching heat inside my dreams, twisting voices into song. I skinned myself with hollowed wood and screamed for comprehension. ===================== Not a shade of gray could represent, not a slide of thought explain. ======================== But instead I took the denim and followed, I took the beaten white display of you and delved. Skipping anger into forests, thrusting love unto the trees - wishing days would circle hunger accept the danger in it's wings,...and release. ======================== seeing things thru your poetic eyes is cooler than you know... this is so unique and fresh ... so raw and real. SO Spitfire ... and thats always a good thing. excellent imagery and expression dear poet of the porch. very cool write. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! As LW has said, this one is awesome my friend. One of the best(imho)! Peace to you! "I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sven, thank you much for visiting me and for the kindness that you left behind. ~Lw, and you are just the sweetest to say all that. Thank you. ~Insect, I truly adore the way you reply. Leave me smiling everytime! ~Ethan Halo, I appreciate the explanation of what it felt like. I always enjoy knowing where (if) it took a reader. Thanks for what you've said. ~JMJMJM, your replies fill me up ya know. Right up. Thank you much. ~Eddie, good to see you man. Great to hear from you too. Thank you truly for what you've left. *Peace Poets. |
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