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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri

0 posted 2001-03-21 03:17 PM


Petals from a rose
Strewn across our scented bed
Love in the morning

© Copyright 2001 Paula Finn - All Rights Reserved
Chelsea~
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since 2001-02-09
Posts 260
Ontario, CANADA
1 posted 2001-03-21 03:20 PM


paula,

this is incredible,
so beautiful

Jellybean King
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since 2001-03-07
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Jelly, Bean
2 posted 2001-03-21 03:33 PM


I loved this haiku...flickers of images from each line are reflected in the next....

Petals from a rose
Strewn across our scented bed
Love in the morning

...so much so, that I enjoyed reading it with the 1st and 3rd inverted too!

Love in the morning
Strewn across our scented bed
Petals from a rose

(sorry, hope you don't mind...just couldn't help myself)

...either way it's just terrific.

Jellybean King

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-03-21 03:36 PM


yes, lovely, just lovely.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2001-03-21 04:19 PM


Sounds like you went to bed and got really wild after a very romantic evening! You little deviless you.....petals petals everywhere strewn all over the place.....I can imagine what went on!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Panne
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since 2001-01-31
Posts 15
South TX, USA
5 posted 2001-03-21 04:28 PM


Paula, This is a beautiful Senyru. I shows not tells. really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing this read.
Panne

RMW
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since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424

6 posted 2001-03-21 04:36 PM


Paula,

Very vivid....yet soft.

RMW

vandana
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7 posted 2001-03-21 05:17 PM


enjoy
Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
8 posted 2001-03-21 05:23 PM


call me a softie, but i thought of a Jewel song when i read this... "morning song"

you evoke so much with so few words... i love your style

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.

"It don't mean a thing
if it ain't got that swing."

Marsha
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9 posted 2001-03-21 05:58 PM


Paula sister mine, I love this utterly it's utterly fabulous.
You do know I love this. Of course you do. Well you know where I am, and remember I'm flying there with you love always.

Fabulous work I truly am awed but this dear heart

take care love as always
Mushy


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
10 posted 2001-03-21 06:06 PM


Paula I think I watched this scene in the movie "American Beauty". James
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
11 posted 2001-03-22 01:07 AM


Chelsea...Thanks so much Im pleased you found it beautiful

Jellybean King...lol no I dont mind...I like it when something I write makes someone else play with the words...love your name BTW...

Kathleen sweet rose...I thought you might like this one...thanks

ethome...LOL and just whats going on in that mind of yours you naughty thing? HAHAHA!!! You know I'm innocent dont ya?

Panne...I'm glad you could see the image...thank you

RMW...theres not to many things softer than a rose petal...thank you

vandana...good Im glad you did...thank you

Ethan...well hey there...good to have you back again...Ive missed you...thanks for your sweet words

Hi my sis...here you are again...making me feel as if I truly can write LOL...you are such a gift...thank you

James...well I have to admit Ive never seen that movie...does make a lovely image tho...thanks sweet friend


JLR
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since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785

12 posted 2001-03-22 02:17 PM


Beautiful, romantic image. This is very nice.
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