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Open Poetry #12

Sun Shine & Shadows

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-03-18 09:51 AM

Brightly shine, upon her face,
Warming smile, she stands in place;

Eyes closing, Imagining,
Thoughts that fly, remembering,

The sunshine, bouncing off the windows,
Warm spreading, push back shadows.

He’s hiding,
Darkness now recedes away,
Gone the night,
Comes the light,
Feel the piercing of the day,
Beaten back,
Comfort black,
Inside behind dark windows,
Make soundless,
Friend darkness,
Settle into realm of shadows,
He’s hiding,
Never meeting child of day.

Gloom

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-03-18 01:52 PM

well done poet sir....
a poetic contrast and comparison...
very creative write...nice presentation
and unique ryhme scheme in the shadow verse.
great work
take care
jm

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

2 posted 2001-03-19 12:03 PM

I like this...

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

3 posted 2001-03-20 10:05 PM

Professor, I've returned to this poem several times this evening, not knowing ~ perhaps not trusting ~ whether my instincts are correct about its message. It seems at once, and on a very basic level, to be a study of two very differently motivated characters. Upon closer examination, however, I wonder if these two reside within the same physical being. Just mental meanderings on my part, but I must say I find much intrigue here, as in everything of yours I have had the opportunity to read. Thanks very much for this one.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-03-20 10:22 PM

Oh Claire, it is the thought [to me] of both sides of the brain, when one talks to one, of the good and bad in one's soul, and all of the nuances inbetween....

IMHO....

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