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Heartstarter
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since 2001-03-14
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0 posted 2001-03-17 02:43 AM



I got myself lost late last night
walking home a different way;
What prompted me to walk so far
I really couldn't say,
prehaps the chill the rabbit left
while dancing on my grave.
I walked until the light stood still
while I strode on beyond it,
I walked until my winding street
turned suddenly symetric,
I walked and listened as my reason
told my logic not to sweat it.
I walked until my straightaway
predictably diverted,
I stopped my mindless feet at last,
perplexed and disconcerted;
I gazed in wide eyed weariness
at two roads that looked deserted.
I stood and looked at those two roads
considering what to do,
I had walked into my choices
without a single clue,
and I sensed that some decision
was long since overdue.
I looked left and I looked right,
I looked around behind me;
I hoped if I looked long enough
the calvary would find me,
and as I thought all hope was lost,
this voice spoke up beside me.
She said she walked a ways with me,
and that I never knew it;
She said I'd come the farthest yet,
and she hoped that I could do it,
But both the roads beyond were rough,
and most before me blew it.
She whispered that it broke the rules,
but she had a clue to lend,
she told me to listen with my heart
so I could comprehend;
That I must start from the beginning
to appreciate the end.
I turned towards the voice beside me,
to find I was alone,
somewhere between the word and the thought
she had managed to be gone.
So I took her advice and turned around
and walked myself back home.

© Copyright 2001 Heartstarter - All Rights Reserved
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2001-03-17 07:48 AM


That was a long walk and now I'm tired....whew good writing! Welcome to Passions...have a nice time here...this is what I mean....

"I walked until the light stood still
while I strode on beyond it,
I walked until my winding street
turned suddenly symetric,
I walked and listened as my reason
told my logic not to sweat it.
I walked until my straightaway
predictably diverted, "

Ilkie the ending too, it's very wise. If at first you don't and all that.....good work!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Celeste
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since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

2 posted 2001-03-17 07:58 AM


Really nice lessons throughout this. I liked it!

"The way I see it, if you want the rainbow, you gotta put up with the rain."

Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2001-03-17 09:11 AM


Heartstarter....you have chosen a good name....and many, many will come to read you, and enjoy your words, and take home a lesson, I can tell....

and this is one I wish I had written, so into my library you go....whoosh!

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2001-03-17 09:14 AM


I really enjoyed this poem. Welcome to our family!
Heartstarter
Junior Member
since 2001-03-14
Posts 39

5 posted 2001-03-17 10:44 AM


Geee....Thank you all so much for the lovely comments!
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