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To Feel Again |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Pour your eyes all over me And rain on that moment in time See the mind that rules the body Touch the part left behind Let me become who I need to be I need to feel what it is like to feel Once again Unlock all the mysteries inside me The dark void that swallows the light Enter into secret paths willingly And why I embrace the comfort of night Are the reasons you will come to see Make me feel what it is like to feel Once again Give yourself, all there is, to me Forgetting of such things as time As we come together so completely That we are something that shines And we become, all the more free Let us feel what it is like to feel This time, once again |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Pour your eyes all over me And rain on that moment in time See the mind that rules the body Touch the part left behind Let me become who I need to be I need to feel what it is like to feel Once again wow...just love this first stanza *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Give yourself, all there is, to me Forgetting of such things as time As we come together so completely" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ major swoonin' here......  this is gorgeous! SEA |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Well if it wasn't there before there should be a tag on you that says "warning..flame ahead" because this Mr. Poet is enough to make a winged one get lost in the blue of your blaze! Amazing work~ |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
Exceptional writing, you weave words in the most magical way. I was touched by this poem and I thank you. KateGenuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. T S Eliot |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
PK, I shall read this, once again....and again.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Pour your eyes all over me And rain on that moment in time See the mind that rules the body Touch the part left behind Let me become who I need to be I need to feel what it is like to feel Once again Unlock all the mysteries inside me The dark void that swallows the light Enter into secret paths willingly And why I embrace the comfort of night ===================== Give yourself, all there is, to me Forgetting of such things as time As we come together so completely That we are something that shines ====================== (permission to gloat poet sir?) *S* I just love when my fellow poets prove me right...*L* PK this poem is just so very cool and so poetically lovely in its wording and phrasing, and the cadence is equally impressive. Its written with your gift of expressing the emotions with both depth and poetic subtlety. the longing, the sensual undertones that are oh so well done. Written so the reader feels it ... "Pour your eyes all over me And rain on that moment in time" (oh man) whew *S* "See the mind that rules the body Touch the part left behind" "Unlock all the mysteries inside me The dark void that swallows the light" "As we come together so completely That we are something that shines" see this one thru our eyes.... like Sea-girlie said...its gorgeous  We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Wow, I am speechless. I'm glad you liked this little thing of mine, and indulged my mind spilling forth. *S* |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Poetic Knight, I think this is an absolutely stunning poem, smooth and sensual. I'm going to keep this to read again and again on lonely nights...When chocolate doesn't work  write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I love this too, the first line is so rich, and it carries through the rest of the poem. Wonderful images. Sandra |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Give yourself, all there is, to me Forgetting of such things as time As we come together so completely That we are something that shines And we become, all the more free Let us feel what it is like to feel This time, once again' I will echo everyone else when I say that this is simply breathtaking! Very wonderfully written! sp  to be with you... |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
  Hard to beat this showing of poetic prowess. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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