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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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nothing, naught is as it seemed awakening the silent scream no longer sure which is the dream direct me to reality and help me to remember ME... and yes, the road was yellow, bricked now dampened by my tears made slick the tin man really has no heart but oh, he's got an iron grip... the scarecrow? he has lost his straw... the lion has now been de-clawed, Galinda is a bubble's burst, the wicked witch? A fable's thirst for but an ogre to be had... The bad is good-- the good is bad. Awakening from poppies' spell... lethargy in which I dwell... shadows mocking dante's hell-- Oz was just a dream I had. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"no longer sure which is the dream direct me to reality" I like the allusions in this piece. Indeed its hard to distinguish the reality in things sometimes, but we must always hold onto what we knows real and keep strong. Wish you well always. take care, Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderful! Very cleverly written piece This was so enjoyable a read Liz |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
great writing, girl! poppy field you say? remember when the movie was black and white at the beginning and then turned into color? did you know that was the very first color movie ever made? i know some things about movies... i LOVE that movie! i watch it over and over and over and never get tired of it! *smile.... this is an awesome verse! now where IS that poppy field!?? i'm going back! *g.... keeps me outa reality, y'know? *geesh* (and these comments after my anti-drug rampage a few days ago... go figure!) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
nothing, naught is as it seemed awakening the silent scream no longer sure which is the dream ****direct me to reality and help me to remember ME...**** and yes, the road was yellow, bricked now dampened by my tears made slick the tin man really has no heart but oh, he's got an iron grip... ================== *shaking me head* ... and I read this right after sending you THAT EMAIL ... baby..are ya enjoying your stay in me mirror... oh man...I cant believe your timing.... YES I CAN.... once again me twin....once again... what a very very cool poem... what a very very gifted poet love ya me girlie me baby can I hold you tonite ... maybe if I said the right words, at the right time ... you'd be mine. baby can I hold you tonite. ~tracy chapman~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
And then she clicked her ruby slippers, and the dream was over..I always wondered why she did that... Such an enjoyable verse, and pulling that eternal fantasy into it was just a wild stroke of genius  Love it. Sandra |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
hey Sista, wonderful writing dear.... no longer sure which is the dream direct me to reality and help me to remember ME.. can relate to this loved it all Maree I need a lullaby a kiss goodnight Angel sweet love of my life Oh, I need this ~Natalie Merchant~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'no longer sure which is the dream direct me to reality and help me to remember ME...' You have said perfectly something I've been trying for ages to say. Who knew it could be done in so few words? Excellent write, serenity. Enjoyed reading something that makes so much sense. Thanks for sharing this. sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiles and hugs and thanks to all....and HEY? DOROTHY SURRENDERS.... it's been real...... |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Bravo!!! I loved this. what a great work of art you penned. Love and light, Richard |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dorothy~ This is brilliant ! 'the scarecrow? he has lost his straw... the lion has now been de-clawed, Galinda is a bubble's burst, the wicked witch? A fable's thirst for but an ogre to be had... The bad is good-- the good is bad.' Yep ... no two ways about it ... B R I L L I A N T ! !~*ToTo*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
lovely and clever bit o verse you've got there. i would've worked in a flying monkey, but then some people think i'm, well, strange.  "help me to remember me" indeed. a lesson i had to reteach myself over the past few weeks. the lesson continues. as does its success. thanks for dropping the hint on me. (and the house.) You don't hear much about guys who take their shot and miss... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Brilliant piece of work hon...loved the read ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Evoking powrful images this morning.......(that is one of my favorite movies and I still see something I missed the last time) This sure puts a different spin on things  -SEA |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjot the read |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjot the read |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
hope that you haven't forgotten you. . . excellent poem my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Wonderful write serene, real fantasia feel. Rich |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Everything I am reading tonight feels directed right at me...this is wonderful |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Click your heels together....there's no place like home.......... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Excellent theme, imagery and message, extremely clever and so well penned! Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, I'm so glad I got to catch this and I'm zipping it into my library rite away b4 I forget... Gosh, ya know I just love reading your style of poetry... ThankuMyFriend... *~coco~* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow. Thanks everybody. And yanno? "there's no place like home...." I do love you good poet people. HUGS TO FORUM. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Never thought I would say this out loud but Thank God for tornadoes!!!! Wonderful read!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful write Celeste! You're really on a roll there kid! |
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