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Trillium
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0 posted 2001-03-13 03:03 PM



My sojourn here is at an end.
It's time to say good-bye, my friend.
I've done the things I had to do
And said farewell to all, but you.
Between us there has been a tie.
You've let the summer pass on by
Without a word to show that you
Feel more than friendship. I have too.
I see you standing by the door.
We hold hands, as we have before,
But when I start to turn away,
You utter just that one word, "stay!"
And stay I will, for I can see
Within your eyes, my destiny!

© Copyright 2001 Betty Lou Hebert - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-14 05:27 AM


How nice to find your destiny...James
Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-03-14 10:31 AM


A simple rhyme. I enjoyed it a great deal.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort


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3 posted 2001-03-14 10:39 AM


beautiful..I often feel that way
and wish for him to stay...

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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4 posted 2001-03-14 10:49 AM


nice poem
Trillium
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5 posted 2001-03-14 05:53 PM


James, Allen, nakdthoughts and Vandana:

Thank you all for commenting on this poem. I appreciate your remarks.


Betty Lou Hebert

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6 posted 2001-03-15 08:07 AM


Trillium~
Oh... nice, very nice.
You captured a moment that lasts ...

And I, in soft turning ... stay.
~*Marge*~


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7 posted 2001-03-15 09:01 AM


Betty....wow!
Nate Dogg
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8 posted 2001-03-15 11:33 AM


A well-written piece.....wonderful poem....thanks for sharing!

Nathan

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