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| Open Poetry #12 |
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Autoimmunity |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Autoimmunity I am war, I fight myself against myself. Secretly I sent spies deep into the enemy territory to glean the weak spots and bring them back to me. Meticulously I penned each report, later to analyze. Shortly, I knew exactly what I needed to win and I attacked hitting often and accurately because of course I knew beforehand each and every countermove. Brainwashing and torture… deprivation, I stopped at nothing. I cajoled and promised relief in exchange for surrender and so tearful and weak from loss of heart I finally gave in. Nervously I sit on my throne tap tapping my victory intent on leaving no detail undone. Trust is no longer a valid operation dictators need no take over witnesses. Systematically I plot the elimination of the prisoner, but first… I must kill the spies |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ok, well, I didn't understand, but I liked it, lots of different ways this can be taken.....  great writing SEA |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i loved it!! great images, metaphors and flow.... felt this way before, as i'm sure you know.... sometimes it's time to send in the reinforcements and not do battle alone.... i might even resort, myself, to paying someone to listen to me for an hour every now and then.... geesh  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
SEA...its probably a good thing you don't understand this one...sigh...so that's ok, and thank you and yep doreen, knew you would understand...thanks...and lol@pay someone...that's exactly what my doc is telling me I need |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Geesh... so this is your response to me calling you "simple-minded?" LOL. Gimme a chance to switch out of blonde mode. *G* Seriously... I think many of us can identify with being at war with ourselves... there is no winner. Trust is no longer a valid operation dictators need no take over witnesses. Systematically I plot the elimination of the prisoner, but first… I must kill the spies I do love these lines... and you know how I'm pulling for the prisoner... may all the plots be stymied! *S* And by the way... complicated suits you. *S* |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Jellybeans, the pain and depth of this is outstanding. I crave depth, in reading, and you have given much. I shall place this in my library to reflect upon. Outstanding writing. I am in awe. After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
lolol...wait a minute...you called me simple minded??? where was I? oh yeah...that confused state I have been calling my life lately...lol.....*squints and shakes her head*....you called me simple minded??????? lolol...no really...from where i sit (padded walls and small barred door) this makes perfect sense but yep am pulling for the prisoner too...I sneak her redhots when no one is looking Just a woman...yes...well was gonna say it is deep, but more it is complicated...I have been diagnosed with an autoimmune disorder that sends my body spiraling into pain when i am over stressed...and these last 2 weeks, 'someone' has been trying to see just how much I can take I guess.....sigh..thanks for your comments |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I don't think there are any battles more fierce than the ones we fight within ourselves.....how well you express this, lady... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thanks bal, and yep, today i feel like a battlefield "medic???????? medic????????? I could use some mouth to mouth.....lol......good to see you |
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