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Shivers of Dawn
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Shivers of Dawn |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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A scrawl of fluid, golden light Casts sunlight lace upon this turf Where the quiet elegance of you Once stood... Shadows swell from the edges Smothering the dying saffron orb ~Suffocating my will~ With it’s dark, opaque force... The semblance of a twilight covering Is brutally tattered By the lacerations of your memory... How can I find peace tonight When within every star-sparkle I see your eyes? The flutterings of cool air Brush sweetly over my cheeks ~sponging up my tears~ Pressing soft to my skin, And offering trace of comfort To this misty, shaded soul... And then the first shivers of dawn Prickle upon my face... Your image gently wavers ~fading from this heart~ And the fragments of emerging day Remind me that after love Tomorrow still comes. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Beautifully well said. Tomorrow still comes. Joyce |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Beautiful piece of writing, my dear. Haunting memories cleansed by the "first shivers of dawn." (I absolutely adore that image!  ) "How can I find peace tonight When within every star-sparkle I see your eyes?" Loved those lines, too. Enjoyed this one muchly, love  "And every state of mind, left to itself, every shutting up of the creature within the dungeon of its own mind - is, in the end, Hell" - C.S. Lewis |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ Stunning is what this is ! ! 'And then the first shivers of dawn Prickle upon my face... Your image gently wavers ~fading from this heart~ And the fragments of emerging day Remind me that after love Tomorrow still comes.' It's a wowser ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The flutterings of cool air Brush sweetly over my cheeks ~sponging up my tears~ Pressing soft to my skin, And offering trace of comfort To this misty, shaded soul..." Excellent imagery Krista, and so eloquently penned ... beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A scrawl of fluid, golden light Casts sunlight lace upon this turf Where the quiet elegance of you Once stood... Shadows swell from the edges Smothering the dying saffron orb ~Suffocating my will~ With it’s dark, opaque force... The semblance of a twilight covering Is brutally tattered By the lacerations of your memory... How can I find peace tonight When within every star-sparkle I see your eyes? ======================== such descriptive, powerful words and images to define the longing, loss, ache, and need. And as always such unique phrases and images nothing ever cliche' from you .. yet the poetry is written with the grace and style of a classic. wonderful writing K. Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Krista, this is stunning m'dear, I floated while reading each line and even more so with these lines.... "How can I find peace tonight When within every star-sparkle I see your eyes?"............ What a beautiful image! "Tomorrow still comes." .......... Loved the way you closed it. Yes tomorrow still comes. Gorgeous writing Krista! Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-12-2001).] |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Beautiful Krissa.. i like the stary line that everyone else likes.. but i guess that's just me! mwahahaha. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Joyce- Thank you.  Abrahm- Thank you very much, your support means a lot to me.  Marge- Thanks for reading, my friend!  Kit- Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it.  JM- You're a sweetheart, my friend. I appreciate your sentiments and kind words soo much!Maree- Thanks, I appreciate it!  Cassers- You and your space....it's all about space, isn't it? LOL, thanks for reading dearie. *Krista Knutson* "Can't run fast enough Can't hide I can't fly I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman |
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