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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Hmm I wrote this back in December, didnt get round to posting it for some reason, anyway hope you enjoy.  twisted you stand there head aflame, with green flowing through your veins your body, a brick wall with eyes of white blinded. I won't accept the silence of me, nor will I surrender to wicked tendrils of Eden that grow over and around me, where peace is twisted and muted tongues hang collapsed, like thirsty dogs on a hot day. unripe, unseasoned I am but food for your mind a fruit waiting to be released, to ripen, and only then, will I let go. Dark Angel Dec 2000 I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-10-2001).] |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
"Where peace is twisted" Oh that is one of those "Wish I had written that" Very forceful poem, words ragged edged, no purposefully serrated, I think better describes this. My compliments AT "Beginning is one place, I've been before." J. Anderson |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree--You words are very powerful...your descriptions are great..."green flowing through veins", "wicked tendrils of edan", you have done such a good job saying I'm angry without actually saying it. Your poem also shows strength Maree, in not eccepting this evil, what ever it is...I'm glad. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Young lady, this is fabulous. A great offering from your brief lack of muse!!!! Love it. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
So interesting and moving it is a powerful poem.. Thanks for posting it! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
frightening yet delightful read miss DA cool yuh |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you stand there head aflame, with green flowing through your veins your body, a brick wall with eyes of white blinded. I won't accept the silence of me, nor will I surrender to wicked tendrils of Eden that grow over and around me, ============ very cool write of metaphor and imagery DA .. clever turn of phrase and metaphor with the Eden references and the fruit tie in in the last verse. powerful expressions and message well done poet girlie take care jm We're living in a world full of illusion Everything is so unreal My mind is in a state of confusion But I can't deny the way I feel ~Depeche Mode~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
maree-- wow i simply loved this! such wonderful writing from your pen. brought such a smile to my face to see your name upon these pages of blue today gladyou decided to post this one and share it with all of us...spendid imagery in this woven with your usual wonderful grace take care hon amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
AT Thank you very much for taking the time to read and for your compliments Oh Martie, thank you so very much for your lovely reply and compliment. Thanks for taking the time to read. Kathleen, thank you, thank you so very much HUGSFrightening Walty? ooh I am sorry. thanks for reading m'dear. Janet, so glad you enjoyed it m'dear and thank you so very much for your lovely reply and for taking the time to read I appreciate it so much.Amy, so glad to have brought a smile upon your face hon, If only my muse would hurry up from vacation, I am missing her. And once she returns, you'll see more of me on these blue pages Thanks dear for taking the time to read and for your lovely reply Hugs Thank you all so very much for taking the time to read and reply, I appreciate it so very much Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-11-2001).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Powerful imagery Angel!! Very well written. I'm glad you came across it and posted. Excellent piece <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I agree with everyone else, this is a very powerful piece.....take care! Nathan |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Extremely unique imagery, my friend.  I loved all of this Maree, I'm glad you posted it!  *Krista Knutson* "Can't run fast enough Can't hide I can't fly I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
I liked your images, really could relate to this. Nice read.  Red |
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