Open Poetry #12 |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop (there's insanity in santee, i heard) pop pop pop pop pop pop (the picture shows a girl with rainbow nails) pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop (grown-ups don't wear their nails like that) pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop (i guess that means she'll have to stop) pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop (another witness said they heard his smile through the wall) pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop (a meal cart to protect the guard's shot foot) pop pop pop pop pop pop (and nothing else run) pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop pop runchildrenrunbecausehehasagun poppoppoppoppoppop. he said "it's only me." [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
bsquirrel, I didn't get this at first and then it hit me. Can you tell me what is happening to our world? We need someone to look up to. So far, God is the only one who hasn't let us down. Great poem, ME |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Once again, you took a topic that is uncomfortable to think about and presented it in a dramatic way. Another performance piece, methinks. Good to see ya luvie...and the e mail is a long sad story, too. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
And, ME, He will continue to be the only one to not let us down. Even His people will let us down, but hopefully not as often. It's all about access, pain, being lost and too few leading the right direction. painful poem, sir, it's as if it's riveting the pain to the wall |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Mother Earth and VAS, thanks for reading and for commenting. Yeah, I don't know what's wrong with the world, either; but I'm hoping it isn't a permanent affliction. S'en, oh boy, do YOU owe me a story. E-mail me, k? Well, someday. Love ya lots. Mike |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yeah Mike I know. It's a sick old world, people living in fear, it's not right! Great poem! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
It's funny, I had bullies all through school....some were easily ignored, and others really hurt feelings....my father has always had guns, he took me shooting almost every weekend.....I was a pretty good shot....but never, I mean NEVER did I ever think of shooting someone. It terrifies the hell out of me that kids are killing each other, and throwing their own lives away....like they were nothing....it's so sad....I suppose that's the main reason why I'm home schooling my kids.....wow Mike, you sent a flood of emotions through me with this one.... SEA |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
i agree...with all the above, the repetitive format of this brings the subject out so clearly so dramatically......great stuff |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, everyone, for your replies. I'm glad it's able to breed discussion and thought. I wish it were able to breed answers. Mike |
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