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Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

0 posted 2001-03-06 03:44 PM

Composed are thoughts into the calm pervasive glow of the serene
Awash in still deep flow within to drift in purity of scenes
That come un-bidden into sight as weight no longer binds the mass
To float the star-lit fields of night as from this height beneath does pass

The textured surface of a world drawn into focus from above
Whose peaks and valleys correspond to emptiness and times of love
And see there spead before your eyes the map of those important things
With clarity of vision lent that only such detachment brings

Beyond the veil which shrouds this view and parts begrudgingly at first
For often we may be misled by that which false may quench our thirst
Lies cannot here be told nor heard for they've no place to grab foothold
Now left behind no longer grasped for life that's over-valued gold

To nourish but an empty shell and one that I have known too well

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (edited 03-06-2001).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2001-03-06 05:11 PM

hmmmm this is one I must read over and over to get the full impact...and shall return

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2001-03-06 09:14 PM

We can always see things more clearly, see things as they really are in those reflective moments, can't we? Very well expressed, Dr.Moose!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2001-03-06 10:18 PM

What an astute diagnosis.

Made my spirit soar with this piece...loved the free floating detachment of self observation...(just don't make me do that)

I enjoyed this a great deal. Library.

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

4 posted 2001-03-08 02:13 PM

Way deep Doc! Had to dawn the mental scuba gear for this one. Like the thoughts and the style... and that last line... a perfect wrap up. I bow to you and yours... and now it's back to the surface you go.

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

5 posted 2001-03-10 01:24 AM

Doc, I would love to hear this piece read aloud. You have an uncanny ability to compose with the sort of rhythm, diction and imagery that stirs this reader. Thank you for another delight.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

6 posted 2001-03-10 02:49 PM

My thanks to all who replied . This is my second attempt at a piece in iambic octometer, which seemed fit nicely with what I was trying to say .

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