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O Hollow Man
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O Hollow Man |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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O Hollow Man can't you see It's not a hollow victory When people see the things, you see It helps reveal life's mystery O Hollow Man can't you tell They think they know you, oh so well By truth telling you forthtell A way to make their future well O Hollow Man can you aspire To use your poetry to take folk higher Learn to feel love and desire Be lifted up from daily mire O Hollow Man filled with love Born of beauty from heaven above You, your feelings hand in glove Revealing faith, providing love O Hollow Man fly, high and long People need to hear your song Need to forget, or be swept along, to make them real. Is that so wrong? O Hollow Man may you be filled With the peace, you on others willed May those doubts and fears be stilled I wish for you, your dreams fulfilled O Hollow Man the mirrored one Has not a heart, that leaves life undone You're filled wit and wisdom's fun Not now hollow, filled with sun Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Keth? I like this much...had me all a-ponder, not quite sure if I liked this hollow man or not---sort of like the "nowhere man", I wanted to feel sorry for him, but somehow couldn't? And? couldn't decide if the hollow was for lack of feeling inside of him for others or others lack of feeling for him. (And truly? I think that interplays) A very interesting thoughtful write here, lovie.  |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
well, ma'ham I really didn't understand this, but I'll read it again... Dennis |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
O Hollow Man can't you see It's not a hollow victory When people see the things, you see It helps reveal life's mystery O Hollow Man can't you tell They think they know you, oh so well By truth telling you forthtell A way to make their future well O Hollow Man can you aspire To use your poetry to take folk higher Learn to feel love and desire Be lifted up from daily mire ===================== i think the poetic message here is that when one shares their pain, or lessons learned, their poetic wisdom... that they gain from what we learn from them and they heal in the release of their writing. at least thats how I read this very cool write excellent cadence Keth cool repetative rhyme theme and title usage well done girlie Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry dear heart, the truth is that this is brilliant, utterly faboulous work. Yes I do mean it, this is outstanding love it really is. Utterly truly wonderful. Take care love as always Slushy Did I say this is good, because it really is this is superb  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very well done Kethry I liked the flow of the rhyme scheme and the message for the reader is fulfilling....thanks ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks everyone, this was written for a friend of mine who doesn't believe in himself. So the interpretations given were all valid. be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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