limerick---written during one of my mental lapses

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Open Poetry #12

limerick---written during one of my mental lapses

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-03-02 12:12 PM

there was an old dog from Nantucket
who kept a dead toad in his bucket
he said, I must admit
it looks alot like green spit
and my friend I hope you don’t suck it.
I still can't believe I wrote it. Maybe an alter ego, eh?

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

1 posted 2001-03-02 03:12 AM

well its refreshing to be able to try out something new for a change...

anyway, i dont know for sure but i think the last word in the last line should rhyme with the last words in the first and second lines instead...

keep writing these limericks though

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

2 posted 2001-03-02 05:37 AM

VAS,
lol. or eeeew

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2001-03-02 08:32 AM

Yes, Kaile, that's right and the last word/s in the last line of the limerick, line five does rhyme with the 1st and 2nd lines. The last line on the page was typed several lines down and is not a part of the limerick. Even though PIP placed it as if it were a 6th line. That in itself would have been a violation of form as a limerick has only 5 lines. Oh well, I tried to post it correctly.

And, Kethry, ewwww is right! LOL

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

4 posted 2001-03-03 10:22 AM

Viginia love, and who cares for the rules anyway. I love this one I really do. Why didn't I see it before? I obviously wasn't being attentive.

Virginia the vicars daughter
The facts of life she knew sorta
But when her boyfriend said hey
She thought he said lay
And that's how daddy the vicar caught her

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Fabulous work love
Take care love as always
Mushy

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

5 posted 2001-03-03 10:55 AM

Whatever you do don't suck it!

A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2001-03-03 10:57 AM

Aw c'mon what dog would think like that arf arf! Wouldn't he just think... hey this is a toad and I'm gonna play with it! Delightful fun!

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