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Forget Me, You Say
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Forget Me, You Say |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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How can I look at you, be my friend, you say, when all I long to do, we had our time, you say, is hold, hold you tight. How can I think of you, I really loved you then, you say, deep in the night, but it's gone, you say, when it's just a pillow, remember us that way, you say, not your eyes in the light. How can I still love you, we had the heat, and the fire, you say when it's no longer returned, it was wonderful and beautiful, you say, when all I have are memories, but it's gone now, I love another, you say of the love that we shared. How can I keep from crying, be my friend, you say, how can I bear to live this way, we had our time, you say, I love you, I love you, how I love you, Forget me, you say… oh God,help me face another day. w. james beard, jr. © January 2001 ...was listening to "Maybe" by Janis Joplin (remember that??) on the radio a few minutes ago and this is what popped out... [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 01-14-2001).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jimmy love, oh this is sooooooo heart wrenching, I can feel this I truly can, which just proves how much talent you have. Utterly wonderful writing from you really excellant Take care love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Thank You Mushy. jwesley |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JWesley~ What an intricate weaving of thoughts. Most creative, my friend. Thanks to your creativity we get two for the price of one ! Neat ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Touching piece...there's no such thing as forgetting after love, wonderful write...enjoyed the read.. Poeminister |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Jimmy.... I must agree with Marge..Yes, 2 for 1 here..  I could picture 2 standing and both trying to say what was needed , at the same time..Wonder if either one heard??  Thank you for a wonderful read... ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Beckalini Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 151Yorkshire, England |
JWesley, I really enjoyed this very creative piece. The subject may not be the most cheerful, but you captured the feelings so well that I couldn't help but smile. Stay happy ~Becky~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes those are very sad days...to finally realize you have lost anothers love...and nothing you can do will bring it back..take care...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
James, I loved the way you made this conversational and moved it back and forth between the two voices. write on Kethry. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
James--The diaglogue you build really brings across the different points of view...very well done. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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