Echo from the Past (Whispers challenge)

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Dee
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0 posted 2001-02-27 03:42 PM

Echo From The Past.

You have left my sight, but,
Your memory lingers on.
Loved face that’s still so clear
Even after you’re gone.
Feint whispers in the dark
A voice, a memory,
An echo from the past
That haunts me, teasingly.
I miss your warm embrace,
Your wisdom and your love
But in the greater plan
You were needed above.

27/2/2001

Dedicated to my Dad, whom I still miss and think of at the oddest times.

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Agust P
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1 posted 2001-02-27 03:44 PM

"But in the greater plan
You were needed above"

A very nice expression, thanks! AP

Dee
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2 posted 2001-02-27 03:47 PM

Agust P thanks for taking the time to read.
Dee

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JLR
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3 posted 2001-02-27 03:52 PM

This is very nice...I like it.

Dee
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4 posted 2001-02-27 03:54 PM

Thanks JLR, glad you liked it.
Dee

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Auguste

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5 posted 2001-02-27 05:23 PM

Dee,

This is a lovely and touching poem. As you aready know, my father is also gone, so I can relate very well to this poem. If you don't mind, I thought I might show you a better way of formatting this poem to make if more effective. A peaceful day to you, my friend.

Love,
Michael

Echo From The Past.

You have left my
sight,
but, your
memory lingers on.

Loved face
that’s still
so clear

Even
after you’re gone.

Feint whispers
in the dark
A voice,
a memory,
an echo from the past
that haunts me,
teasingly.

I miss your
warm embrace,
your wisdom
and your
love.

But in the
greater plan
You were needed
above.

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

6 posted 2001-02-27 08:33 PM

Lovely....you met the challenge nicely. And I understand what you mean about your dad..sometimes it hits you without warning.

Dee
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Queensland, Australia

7 posted 2001-02-28 02:53 AM

Michael, thanks for the tip. I appreciate your advice.

Sharon, it's still odd sometimes I'll say I have to ask Dad about that, and then I realise what I have just said. Thanks

Dee

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Marge Tindal

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8 posted 2001-02-28 10:13 AM

Dee~
What sweet thoughts, hon.
*Hugs*
I remember too ...
~*Marge*~

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Dee
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9 posted 2001-03-01 05:54 AM

Thanks for the hugs, Marge.

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Janet Marie
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10 posted 2001-03-01 12:58 PM

You have left my sight, but,
Your memory lingers on.
Loved face that’s still so clear
Even after you’re gone.
Feint whispers in the dark
A voice, a memory,
An echo from the past
That haunts me, teasingly.
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oh Dee .. this is so touching and lovely ...
a tender sincere tribute to a special memory
perfect title ...
I dont know what the challenge was ..
but it inspired a beautiful poem in you

take care
jm

Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...

11 posted 2001-03-01 04:28 PM

This one reaches out to me, in reading I once again feel all that emotion so familiar to me. Excellent work me thinks!

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OLIAS
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12 posted 2001-03-01 04:44 PM

Excellent work, I especially liked the last four lines, very touching. Thank you

Regards,
Olias.

Dee
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Queensland, Australia

13 posted 2001-03-02 03:23 AM

Janet, I'm always pleased to see your responses to my poems. Glad you liked it.

Eddie, Nice to see your name here. I think the emotion is familiar to a lot of people here. I'm pleased I touched you with my words.

Olias, Thanks for the encouragement.

Dee

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Dennis
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14 posted 2001-03-02 09:58 AM

bless you, find comfort in your words, others sure do!

Dennis

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15 posted 2001-03-02 10:14 AM

These thoughts of yours are penned with a tenderness that comes from truely feeling the emotions in them and not fearing the release of them into the open world. Your presentation in this piece is only shadowed by the pure devotion in the words and even then the poetic rating would be hugging that "9 to 10" scoring. Lovely read.

Dee
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16 posted 2001-03-03 02:23 AM

Dennis, thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated.

Mark, your encouragement means a lot to me, thank you.

Dee

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