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Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

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0 posted 2001-02-27 12:32 PM

Fog

A lens and cloud white
low under black starlit sky
Snow's melt comes to chill

Night Winds

Old rain crusted snow
polished by southern night winds
Rabbit waits for Spring

Night's Dreams

Cats in a grey chair
black and white pillow each one
Clock ticks the long night's dreams

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krawdad 2.12.01

[This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 02-28-2001).]

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2001-02-27 12:59 PM

e.............beautiful........h

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

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Regina SK; Canada

2 posted 2001-02-27 01:01 AM

Krawdad--I like these,well done.

Poeminister

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2001-02-27 05:00 PM

Krawdad:
I enjoyed these.

Do you mind if I include the 2nd one in the next Passion's Newsletter?

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

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4 posted 2001-02-27 09:27 PM

Bumping to ask again!

Beki
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since 1999-09-15

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Newport Beach, CA, USA

5 posted 2001-02-27 10:49 PM

Night WInds is very good

NC
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since 2001-02-20

Posts 89

6 posted 2001-02-27 10:58 PM

oh, i liked them all
but the second one
is my favorite

nice!

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-02-27 11:32 PM

I'll copy N.C. and add, I think, from what I'm learning that the third one is more of a senyru. Does anyone else know for sure?

These were delightful!!

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

8 posted 2001-02-28 12:59 PM

h.......thanks,lady.......e

Poeminister
These are a lot of fun to attempt, and thanks for the compliment.

Temptress
Yes, you may use, thanks for asking!

Beki,
NC,
Night Winds does seem to 'work' a bit better and I like it best of the three, I think, but the others help set the stage.

Virginia,
Glad for the delight. Hmmm, what do you think makes the third a senryu?

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

9 posted 2001-02-28 01:02 AM

OOps, forgot to 'tag' this one . . .

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

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10 posted 2001-02-28 05:35 PM

adding to library..

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