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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Poem Dear Poet, I’m writing this letter to you For you are the one to make wishes come true I ask just one favor and humbly plead That you will have patience to honor my need The one that I love is a dear friend of mine But my feelings of friendship are crossing the line My love’s turned to passion, my joy into lust How can I explain this without losing trust Dear Poet, please help me to somehow amend A cherished esteem without losing a friend For if I approach him with what’s in my heart I fear that our friendship will be torn apart Please write me a poem to place in his hand And I’ll walk away so that he’ll understand He’ll read your sweet verses and know that the end Of a friendship does not mean he’s losing a friend Dear poet, it’s over, I’m going away I’ve already purchased my fare to L.A. I wonder if he will remember this day When he let the love of his life slip away Dear Poet, your verses are breaking my heart How could you have known it was you from the start And now you have pleaded for me not to part For you were too timid to open your heart Your verse is a promise, a vow of true love A ballad of splendor, the song of a dove Affection so tender I never had guessed The hidden desires that you have confessed Dear poet, I love you, and will to the end For now we can love without losing a friend Oh, how you have answered my innocent plea Thank you for writing this poem for me Elizabeth Santos |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful read Elizabeth ... this is so lovely. All it would take would be the reading of the heart within these lines you've penned ... no further poems or words would be required. Such an amazing and emotion-filled poem Liz ... excellent writing, you had me gripped from beginning to end ... I just loved this!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I just love reading your poems they are always so intense and metered and rhythmed to perfection... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Beautiful flow, Beautiful emotion, Beautiful writing!!!!! "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
beautifully written... |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Beautifully done Elizabeth....emotions are nicely expressed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, A beautiful poem in a beautiful art One that will stay deep in my heart. I wish you good luck on your trip to LA Take care of yourself and have a good stay. Excellent writing. Sy |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A wistful ballad with a happy ending. I like those. (o: Nice writing, Liz. Take care, Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Liz, if ever there was a poem MEANT to be published, it is this one. It is perfection. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I agree with PdV...this IS perfection! But, no big surprise here!  Wonderful write!sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Everything I read from you is so beauiful, I esspecailly like this one tho ~FKA Maria Byrne~ |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Another great one! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
This is so moving and beautiful. Your words had me so sad that she would not have her love. Then I felt the surge of happiness that she wins a lover and keeps her friend. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Such a beautiful poem of love and all that goes with it. Your words in this hold the true meaning of what love should feel like and your talent as a poet expresses them perfectly. I agree with PdV......this one should be published because it is screaming for a chance to sooth a whole world of hearts out there. Superb penning in all respects. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Superb indeed!! As always!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...all one needs do is ask... Lady Santos, thank you for this... |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
great posting. Your writing style is beautiful and easily comprehended. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'll cast my vote with PDV and Mark! *S* This is superb, Elizabeth... and it touches my heart. Beautiful words are enhanced by impeccable flow... WOW! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Have I told you what a wonderful woman and beautiful poet you are Liz?? No?? Well let me say it now. . . This is absolutely beautiful. . . as is the heart of the poet that penned it. . . Thank you. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Excellent poem, great story!!! |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Awesomw poem, written so well. Red |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Best wishes, my friend , its a lovely poem which hopefully sparks a lovely new beginning (curious who is here in LA ) |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
NICE WRITNIG, DEEP EMOTIONS, LOVELY WORDS WHAT CAN I SAY ...IT IS JUST PERFECT.. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Elizabeth, what a beautiful story. I'm such a romantic, I love happy endings. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all so very much for your lovely comments to this poem. It is not true for me, of course, but as Mark said, there are a lot of friendships that turn romantic and many among poets.(so I've heard) Liz |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Always enjoy your poetry, Liz. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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