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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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It comes in waves, not the pleasant, meditative kind or the way you feel in me, but the sucking, treacherous swells where toes touch nothing, the sets rolling in with barely a breath between. When I was young, I jubilantly rode the surf, buoyant, salty currents ferrying me home. Now, I gulp more sea than air. Lifeguards say the trick isn’t to push toward shore, but to swim sideways. © 2001 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 02-22-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sideways is usually the best way to go............  like this a lot Corinne  ~SEA |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
I was never a lifeguard, but I know karate, is this title related to karate, oh please say it is, you ARE Irish right? I LOVE THE WORDS YOU WRITE, love them.... how lovely they are..... Dennis |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Many a life has been saved by heeding those words...James |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Something tells me there is more to this than ocean waves. I really enjoyed reading it and pondering its undertow...its underlying message. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, SEA! Dennis - Tsunami is Japanese for Tidal Wave! Thank you for your kinds words, and yes I'm as Irish as they come! James, VAS, thank you! Corinne |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Corrine - sideways eh? H'mmmm, I kinda like that idea, swimming that is! BC |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Corinne....this is very good....liking me it is.... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
the last stanza caps it off and kicks some booty...great job yuh |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
If I haven't conveyed to you that I think you are MOST EXTRAORDINARY -Let me say it now - NO ONE - communicates with the brevity and force that you do - In recent months I've read a number of great poems by great poets - perhaps more than I have in all the prior months of my life. I bought a number of books of Poetry by Sharon Olds - because I was SO impressed by her work, I went about xtolloing her praise, said she was/is the greatest contemporary woman poet I'd ever read. I tell you now in my opinion you have her talent and more - I most strongly suggest: You should work hard to get yourself published You deserve a wider audience and the world deserves the right to read you! (OK - I'm off my soapbox now ) |
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Agust P Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 157 |
enjoyed this one, a great poem! AP |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Bill Charles - thank you - hmmm, are we speaking of the same thing? Sunshine - thank you! WayoutWalt - thanks, bud! Wilfred - Wow. I don't know what to say, except thank you. I don't feel worthy of such high praise (insecure poet), but I will endeavor to get my stuff out there more. Thank you again, your comments make this form of expression worthwhile. Agust P - thank you! |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Interesting.. I will remember that ...Sideways... thanks! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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