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Dark I. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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on that ending night in the darkness I beheld your shadow of light breathing into you the essence of my dark heart as I held you close we moved into time together into the night Dark I, Shadow she ---------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Nice one Sven....really liked the ending line. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
John, I really like this.......Keep up the good work. ~Laura~ |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Very nice, Sven. The second one is my favorite. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Now Sven, that title of your's just pulled me in, but I bet you knew it would and I must say sweetPoetFriend I enjoyed reading your poem... "breathing into you the essence of my dark heart as I held you close" ...  precious ~coco~ [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 02-21-2001).] |
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Puck Junior Member
since 2001-02-21
Posts 14Oberon's Palace |
I really think this is wonderful, I love the whole thing, it is really really great from you I gather more magic dust and I'll sprinkle it about. But I know where to come for more now.  Iam that merry wanderer of the night I jest to Oberon, and make him smile Puck |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
softly seen by sun magic mystery dancing sweetly romancing |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wonderful! The last line is my favourite. Both dark and loving, well penned Take care, Melissa~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Beautifully done my dear, as always...miss you hun!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Ali, thanks. . . I've been exploring the darkness recently. . . glad that you liked. . . Laura, thank you. . . and thank you for reading. . . Marilyn, yes. . . it's my favorite as well. . . thank you. . . poetFriend Coco, no. . . I didn't plan it that way. . . but I'm glad that you liked the title and that you enjoyed the poem. . . Puck, thank you. . . I seem to have found more of that dust recently. . . Sunshine, thank you so much my friend. . . your words are wonderful. . . Melissa, dark and loving. . . thank you. . . isn't it amazing that you can find this in the dark??? Devina!!!! Hey mommy!!! So wonderful to see you!! Thank you so much. . . .I miss you too. . . as do a lot of other people. . . come back soon!!! ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Excellence as always, Sven! |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
A mood captured and held wonderfully. Excellent writing. To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
we moved into time together into the night Dark I, Shadow she" Love this idea Sven! Great work! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
The master of romantic darkness...I agree about the last line, superb. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Amazing achievement in short lines, a snapshot of a moment in time. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Temptress, thank you. . . Celeste, thank you my friend. . . it's a mood I like. . . ethome, thank you for retruning this. . . glad that you enjoyed!! PK, "Romantic Darkness". . . hmmmmmmmmm. . . you may have given me an idea. . . thank you. . . Julian, thank you my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Sven, brother. This is really great work. "Dark I, Shadow She." The epitome of laconic expression. Loved it. "The poet is the priest of the invisible." |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
breathing into you the essence of my dark heart as I held you close" this is beautiful.....with your touch of passion and class....  Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Sven, "Shadow of light.." I like that. Bob |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sven, I've read this three times now, I just can't frame the words for a reply, so I will offer only this, *HuGS* Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sven - very nice writing my friend, very nice indeed. Much meaning, few words, I liked it. BC |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
coyote, thank you so much. . . Greeneyes, passion and class. . . wow. . . thank you. . . Bob, thanks. . . glad that you liked it. . . Kethry, that's all I need to hear. . . thank you my friend. . . Bill, thank you my friend. . . it's great to be able to say so much with so little. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
short and sweet..
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Sven, for some reason, I have the feeling that the one that broke your heart is responsable for your new type of poetry. It is beautiful. Hugs, ME |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*sigh* wonderful senryus....loved reading these fabulous serie. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Once again, wonderful my friend! Library material. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Voiceless, thank you. . . ME, the one that broke my heart?? Well, no. . . but thank you for your words. . . Charisma, thank you my friend. . . Seraphin, thank you so much. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 03-27-2001).] |
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