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Shadow Harp
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Shadow Harp |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Shadow Harp Virginia Salter shadow-harp on patio floor silently strums melancholy into my heart, my soul yet shadow-ferns trim this sunlit surface framing the light that seeks to illumine my being, my countenance oh that I may take it in make use of its awesome tenderness its seeking to ungray the very inner core of my heart shadow-legs stretch across the expanse in slender stripes giving contrast giving dark and light urging me to stand in the light of morning © August 23. 2000 A shadow from a patio chair, on that day, looked much like the shadow of a harp. Do you think I need to somehow include that information in the poem, or can the poem stand at all well without that info? |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think the poem can stand on its own as it will stimulate the reader to create his/her own perspective with the words......the explanation draws the reader into your virtual reality and also create their own perspective from that...so both ways it will be effective! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
VAS--I like this muchly. You paint the vision clearly to mind. Poeminister |
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