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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Was there a class, I did not take? a pill prescribed to ease the ache? was I to be trained in these lies endeafened ears to painful cries? I pray I am not mortal then, if it pains heart to beat again and if a mirror'd tear should burn? I pray then I might never learn. I'd rather feel it all and die expel my soul--exhale of sigh... I have to give my everything. Without? there is...there is NOTHING. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
'a mirrored tear...' what an awesome image for thought, powerful! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I know what you mean Celeste there isn't enough open truth in the world...truth that should be a coat worn to keep the love inside warm...I have to agree with you, unless you give it your all in the name of honesty then you are smothered in the same hypocricy that blankets the masses of this sick insincere world...good evocative writing here kid!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I pray I am not mortal then, if it pains heart to beat again and if a mirror'd tear should burn? I pray then I might never learn. I'd rather feel it all and die expel my soul--exhale of sigh... ===================== "and if a mirror'd tear should burn?" *sigh* indeed ... this is beautiful me sweet sen ... beautiful in its poetic qualities ... mostly in its reflection of heart... of you love ya me twin me As sure as God made wine you can't wrap your arms around a memory In the dark for me youre the candle flame that flickers to life ~Mission UK~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"'d rather feel it all and die expel my soul--exhale of sigh..." great lines right there, serene one.... and you are absolutely right, of course!!! giving less than really amounts to just about nothing..... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I'd rather feel it all and die expel my soul--exhale of sigh... I have to give my everything. Without? there is...there is NOTHING. *whew*...am I feeling your words today... ~sighing Me "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
S'en me girl...you weave it and create a whirlwind of emotion and feeling...not sure how you do it baby...but it always come through in pure honest "S'en Style"...and Yes...that is a very cool thing!  Love and hugs~ H~ |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Such a powerful thought - such a strong presentation - Bravo! Lary |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoy the read  |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Awesome Serinity! "I'd rather feel it all and die expel my soul--exhale of sigh..." Excellent lines here....excellent lines through out. You've gone so deep, in an impressive three stanza's. Love it....Love it all! ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I really enjoyed this one. I hate being lie to or lie myself. I rather know the truth even if it kills me. Too bad that's not usually the case. At times, I felt exactly the same emotions described in your poem. Thanks for sharing. A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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Carly Maas Junior Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 23Garden City, MI, USA |
This is a very beautiful poem, but of course you could have figured that out without me telling you. Your poem is very powerful and very truthful as a matter-of-fact. There's nothing much to say except that your poem is absolutely beautiful! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Serenity-- I can only agree with all of the above. Excellent writing. Poeminister |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful poem, serenity... wisdom and sincerity abound!!! Well done! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, this rocks....and yep agree with doreen on this one...... ...expel my soul...exhale of sigh... whew...what writing !!!!!!!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
okay...sorry I've been so "hit and miss" lately but I DO want to thank everyone and hope to be catching up on my reading soon! (ISP probs, yanno) but thank you all so much! " Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go." T.S. Eliot |
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