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A Certain Perfect Disarray
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A Certain Perfect Disarray |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Apple-mint sprigs, tiny leaves unfold to sun in ancient prayer-- (supplication...) Ever strives to meet perfection... (daily dedication...) Lemon tree in bloom this year. How perfectly ironic. Blossoms fall--lemon drops-- Heady scent--seductive tonic-- a certain perfect disarray... think i'll let it stay that way... (Some things should be just what they are.) Broad-leaf fern, pine-apple sage, rose-in-bud, "Society's Page," (she used to be all the rage.) spears of iris by the pond and just the slightest curve of palm behind the waterfall-- White ginger standing tall... and pots of basil hunger for planting bringing out an ache in me-- ever wistful--ever wanting-- a shovel full of upturned earth droplets of rain, quenching thirst. "Gentle hands are needed here," said the breeze into my ear. "Ssshh..." It whispered me aware. *repost due to Spring--and would also appreciate any suggestions regarding punctuation--Kamla??? anyone?* |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
how about this? -- _____________________ Apple-mint sprigs, tiny leaves unfold to sun in ancient prayer, supplication. Ever strives to meet perfection, daily dedication. Lemon tree in bloom this year. How perfectly ironic! Blossoms fall, lemon drops, Heady scent, seductive tonic. A certain perfect disarray. I think i'll let it stay that way. Some things should be just what they are. Broad-leaf fern, pine-apple sage, rose-in-bud, society's page. She used to be all the rage! Spears of iris by the pond and just the slightest curve of palm behind the waterfall. White ginger standing tall. And pots of basil hunger for planting, bringing out an ache in me, ever wistful, ever wanting. A shovel full of upturned earth, droplets of rain, quenching thirst. Gentle hands are needed here, said the breeze into my ear. Ssshh, it whispered me aware. _____________________ loved it, btw  [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 02-15-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Apple-mint sprigs, tiny leaves unfold to sun in ancient prayer-- (supplication...) Ever strives to meet perfection... (daily dedication...) Lemon tree in bloom this year. How perfectly ironic. Blossoms fall--lemon drops-- Heady scent--seductive tonic-- a certain perfect disarray... think i'll let it stay that way... (Some things should be just what they are.) ======================= hunger for planting bringing out an ache in me-- ever wistful--ever wanting-- a shovel full of upturned earth droplets of rain, quenching thirst. "Gentle hands are needed here," said the breeze into my ear. "Ssshh..." It whispered me aware. =============== oh yes...THE lemon tree  me thinks me just had a mardi-gras salad...twas delish amazing imagery here me sen ... ya make me ache for dirty knees ... but thats a whole nother poem == rofl When you see thru loves illusion, theres the danger your perfect lover looks like a perfect fool you go running off in search of a perfect stranger |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Not going to try to change this in any way, cause I couldn't I love it, you live in a special place, you can feel the atmosphere in the poem. Sandra |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This is very lovely, leaving whispered promises of things to come, even when other things have gone. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I wanta visit your garden!!!!!! Is there a hammock handy? *G* I'm only 7 hours away... can I come hang out until Jazz Fest? LOL Lovely poem... and yes, a certain disarray gives perfect surprises. *S* |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Excellent visuals here. Oh for a garden surrounding in Spring. My compliments. AT "Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition" |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I wish I could write like you. You seem so free and unrestrained. My work pales by comparison. Good lines and imagery and to me as important, presentation. J |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh Celeste I can't say too much Doreen and Janet have said it all but I can say you are coming up special and I think maybe loving what you do now more than ever... keep up the good work my dear Acadian poet!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
doreen? I confess it doesn't look like this this year...but? I may have to have my self surgically removed from this keyboard and go plant something....time for those cool weather herbs Thanks!Sandra...it IS beautiful there...and come warm weather? Hibiscus, and Zinnias too! It's a nice place to just BE. Thank you. Lady in White...that's the thing...it's all a promise of things to come and how it turns out depends on us...(don't quote me on that!) LOL and thank you! suthern...I'd love to hang out with you anytime...btw...Paul Simon is gracing the Jazzfest this year...the first Friday I think..yanno I gotta be there for that? but first things first...SURVIVE CARNIVAL.. tired already! and no hammock...but I made a nice bench out of a huge piece of driftwood that is right next to the pond? and the Koi are HUGE now too! HUGS and thanks! AT...yes...I love spring...flowers and herbs...don't grow too many vegetables though, the raccoons usually get them... J....what a compliment! Considering how much I admire your talent. Made me head swim. Thank you! ethome...you are so very good for me...you make me feel good about myself, not easy to do either! HUGS cherie! and of course, HUGS TO FORUM! |
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