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The Awakener
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The Awakener |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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You have listened as I spoke of long gray shadows leading dusk into night of ghosts that live in places where dreams have died of a world that is filled with frozen rivers and flowing tears of stars with watchful eyes and days that seemed like nights of trains that sing us lullabies as they glide by on lonely tracks of evenings spent in reminisce of dew covered mornings You have watched as I have slept and you the awakener have coloured the shadows painted the clouds beneath the sinking sun exorcising the memories that had replaced my dreams shown my tears to the ocean to share their salted past given me some warmth to hold on those long nights your song has muted the cries of the sorrowful sonneteer you have raised my expectations awakening a newly risen sun |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and you the awakener have coloured the shadows painted the clouds beneath the sinking sun exorcising the memories that had replaced my dreams shown my tears to the ocean to share their salted past given me some warmth to hold on those long nights your song has muted the cries of the sorrowful sonneteer you have raised my expectations awakening a newly risen sun =========== jamie this is so filled with lovely images and poetic phrases of emotion.. creative, style and presentation... very cool write poet sir In the evening when you see my eyes Looking back at you no disguise Im not sure who you think youll see Im just hoping youll still know that its me |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Oh wow.........my first thought was "I wish I could write like that". Outstanding! I applaud! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The emotion behind this suits you sir!! Wonderful!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"the awakener"--yes, that is exactly what if feels like...wonderful, poet man! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ah Jamie--isn't it wonderful that shadows can be dispelled and darkness turn to light...and tears and laughter shared...this is beautiful! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
of trains that sing us lullabies as they glide by on lonely tracks I love this line...I live near a rail and I actually dont hear the trains as noise anymore...but as a calming sound... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks to each of you for the nice replies. And thanks to the awakener, whose gifts will green other worlds, which is as it should be. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Funny...there is a challenge right now 'timing is everything' - more irony.. I will always listen, and I will watch...even if from a distance. Thankyou for the gift of light, and of a green moon. The awakener believes in a whole lot more now. (and your talent for penning is not as sparse as you might think...) ...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment... T.G.M. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
superb. . . just superb. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jamie...this is just wonderful...and the images it calls to mind are so beautiful |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am so very grateful that I have not missed this.... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
~some months later~ as it should be hey? I disagree ~laughing lightly~ It is nice to reread your poems hon, with a different perspective and vision.  K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Perspective is indeed all important.... and isn't it funny how our perspectives change.. HK>LK from any and every perspective There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
No, not funny - just inevitable... |
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