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Old Baggage |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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People our age Are never without luggage Usually a few steamer trunks Rarely just a backpack Or a valise So - we came together Caught off guard Sparks flew Dull embers glowed A fire blazed In the early twilight And in the long sweet intervals Through the night Baggage was unpacked We never looked away None of the cluttered Dreams now ashes None of the discarded Furniture, curtains Garments now out of fashion Were ignored But neither did any Raise a brow Or cause a frown Still the sands fell Fires ebbed and flowed Dawn pierced The eastern sky And we faced our overnight bags The ones always with us The current The permanent And as we parted We faced our Trespass And we wondered What would endure The new love Or the old Commitment Or both... Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes. ~ Chinese Proverb ~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I too have written pieces about old tapes, otherwise called "baggage"...have a friend who said "quit playing the old tapes...." and it made a lot of sense... as does this! Well done, Sir! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Some really interesting lines here, Wilfred. Raises one's curiosity. |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
What a tale can be read from these lines...and between them... (could be a full-blown novel, *g*). Great write, glad I found it! Lary |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Can relate to this one. Think we all have a story in our unpacked bags... Good poem. Deb |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ I happen to think this is just lovely. 'So - we came together Caught off guard Sparks flew Dull embers glowed A fire blazed In the early twilight' Oh, yes ! So very lovely are the sparks that leap to flame. I REALLY like it !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Constructive Critique: change those first three words!!! Just kidding, Wilfred, we're only 18 right? "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
OH Wils---I miss my backpack and my mocassins...bad!!!! sigh...maybe I missed the message? but hey? was fun while it lasted. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Thank you all - 18 ? I'm not sure I could handle 18 again  moccasins? - I still wear mine until i must go out in bad weather awww shucks - let's leave it at thank you |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I know we all carry this type of baggage around...Id sort of like to think it helps make me a better person...one more able to love and be loved by someone willing to check the bags at the door...but hey what do I know? |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
travel well, pack light........enjoy the trip ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is really great......... SEA |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
i've been struggling to get the volume of luggage down for years = Thanks Paula. SEA |
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