Open Poetry #12 |
Whisper |
jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
Whisper Your touch, a whisper across my face. My body, a haunting for your ghost. Your footsteps, the crunch of packed snow, the beating of my heart. Your breath, frozen in time and air. And without speaking, I can read your words from the chill that surrounds me. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
woohoo!! i like this MUCH! , g "maybe one day we can turn and face our fears maybe one day we can reach out through our tears..." -a grant |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Nicely done Whispers being the loudest words you will barely hear AT "Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition" |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is perfect, just perfect!! It whispers and shouts at the same time....love this one! ~~~ enjoy yourself ~~~ it's later than you think! |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Great!! Made me feel the chill myself! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
This whispers with a chill... wonderful descriptions. Poeminister |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Um, yeah...I felt the chill from here too! Excellent write, jaxjoy! sp everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I really liked this...something in it just...got me K - it was not an unmusical sound: long, falling, half a sigh, like wind in the wires, or a train distancing. The Muse of Distance, A. Williamson |
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