»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #12
»
After, the Dreams
| Open Poetry #12 |
|
After, the Dreams |
|
|
gardawg Junior Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 34W of Seattle |
(At the end, some notes and thoughts) After, the Dreams the tattered remnants of yesterday’s laundry tangle me in their bleached grip, faded paper flowers disappear in the wind as I snatch butterflies from the air and find ……colours cover the table ……like scrabble tiles. ……you score double for cerise, ……I trump with a triple score, ……cerulean crossed with sanguine. ……would you rather play …………rock, …………scissors, …………paper? dirty dishes in the sink, soapy water reflects my face against papier-mâché walls, plasticware dives for the drain hole as I scoop carp from the basin and view ……As snow spirals in the storm, ……I turn round and round ……the once and future lawn ……until together we fall down. ……Cover me with a newly sown ……blanket of white on black ……and we will dance our song ……until spring returns to the lake. reams of note paper fill my chair, sticky with gooseberry honey and persimmon jam; scarps cling to my fingers as I snatch silver moths from the afghan and see ……The door knob turns ……David enters as Samuel leaves ……through the servant’s entrance ……Before I set table for the king …………pomegranates …………hummingbirds …………rosewater beer ……I must wash the prophet’s cup my dreams plastered with paper wishes, letters and words escape to play round the table - and ……at the tea party- ……simple verse ……downed unsweetened * The poem is #5 is a dialogue with 3 other poets. Each italic part represents one of us, I the last. For introduction, I work as a moderator at WDS Writer's Block, manage a competition between boards clled the IBPC, own a barely alive forum called Gandy Creek and am editor of the poetry page at www.writershood.com. I spend of fair amount of time searching for forums for the IBPC and other reasons, and have decided after missing this one that search engines often fail. A very good looking and interesting board. Well worth a visit. Of special interest to me is that I do not see many familiar names, though with the number of screen names some folk use, there may be more than I think. URL's to above are at my homepage which is in my profile. Peace. |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Gary Blankenship - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
a wonderful write... full of imagery and emotion.... i loved the changes from free verse to rhyme ... i know you said this was several poets contributions.... i do that a lot myself in my work but i'm used to talking to myself... *grin welcome and i'll look for more and check out your link...... |
||
|
JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Unique. I enjoyed it, though it will take reading more than once...Thanks! Look forward to seeing more from you. |
||
|
gardawg Junior Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 34W of Seattle |
Doreen, actually this is all mine. We each write a seperate piece. For this group, mine ahve all been poems within poems, mixed styles. To both of you, thanks. Gary |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
gardawg-- I am so glad that you came to visit us here...your poem had me enthralled. |
||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ahhhh.... i SEE! .... geesh... duh! i'm sorta famous for misinterpreting text... LOL... *blush* well, in THAT case... it's even BETTER than i thought... *g nice work and again... welcome to the blue pages.... |
||
|
gardawg Junior Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 34W of Seattle |
Martie, thanks. (it worked for me, but I added the sig in case). D, glad I could fool someone today even if not intended. gar |
||
|
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is an interesting dialogue...would love to see the enjoining pieces...welcome to Passions...I love the vision of words chasing letters round and round the table... |
||
|
gardawg Junior Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 34W of Seattle |
Paula, the dialogue has been posted over the last few weeks at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/AngelLightPoets likely the only place they can all be seen. They should all be labeled 4tete except the first one or two. I will post the first here. Thanks. Gary |
||
|
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh....I tried truly I did...but me and computers just dont see eye to eye...in other words...due to the error of this blonde operator...I cant get to this site HEHEHE |
||
|
adagirl26 New Member
since 2001-02-11
Posts 4 |
Will stay tuned. |
||
|
nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
……As snow spirals in the storm, ……I turn round and round ……the once and future lawn ……until together we fall down. ……Cover me with a newly sown ……blanket of white on black ……and we will dance our song ……until spring returns to the lake. I especially loved this section..but the whole poem was very well done..~S~ ~Wynter...welcome "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
||
|
gardawg Junior Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 34W of Seattle |
nakd or is it thought, thanks. Gary |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
