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My Silent Love (challenge response)
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My Silent Love (challenge response) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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(Years ago - this was a popular song - I repost a bit of the lyrics - and some lines of my own for Sharon's challenge) "You go along never dreaming I care Loving somebody somewhere Leaving me my silent love ... How I long to tell Still it's wrong to tell You would not understand..." I've loved you from afar Over distance, over time Wished for you on every star Wished your love I find sublime Slept each night alone, bereft Hugged my pillow as 'twere you Stuck my lips into its cleft Felt your neck, conceived your 'coo' Danced with a broom Across a solitary room Dreamed of you within such gloom Wondered if it's to be my doom So it is each day and night All my words go out in space Worried myself till I'm a fright Worn the floor with loving pace You're in my dreams Waking or sleeping You're in my prayers I pray God's keeping The warmth of you My thoughts are steeping You stay in my thoughts As night comes creeping Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes. ~ Chinese Proverb ~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your muse is amusing you, Sir, with winged words.... this is wonderful! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Wilfred, Enjoyed the read, some wonderful lines. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think you're dancing with MY broom...the refrigerator makes a good partner too. You met the challenge!!  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sunshine - I never know what my muse will do - thanksSeymour- Thank you - I really appreciate your kind wordsmore than you know Sharon- I've not tried the frig yet - you'll know by then I'm really in trouble Thank you so much |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent sir. . . and I've tried to dance with the fridge. . . but it always wants to lead. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"Worn the floor with loving pace".... this is a really great line.... the poem has the longing and feelings you write about a lot.... nice work here... as far as the broom and the refrigerator? well... if i could find someone to sweep me off my feet, who wouldn't try to make me eat (god, that rhymes!), i wouldn't be bloatware in silent love...... and so i sweep myself away sometimes with words and phrases ceased by brooms which brush my cares away while writing lines of love, increased. no silent love could ever clean the floor beneath -- my eyes have seen too many lovers parting blind.... all long for love! the truest kind. i grab the broom. i scan the room to see if anyone is there and what i find? i may be blind... but i don't see, so i don't care. whoops! got a little carried away writing spontaneous poetry... but all this to say... i enjoyed your poem, mr. yeats! *cheers* you want to be a writer, don't know how or when, find a quiet place, use a humble pen-paul simon |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Sheesh Bill, It's getting harder to thank people for their replies these daze... So I guess I'll tell you first how good this challenge is... then I'll say thank you for your astounding kind words on my "still well" Nice nice work on this one Bill. My head has been else where and nothing came to mind. It appears though that you've caught it well. dale |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is so sweetly written...I hope she realizes how you feel... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*sigh* what a sweet piece of love...enjoyed it a lot Charisma |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sven- I've an oversize fridge - frankly I prefer the broom ~S~ Thanks Doreen- when ever ANYONE writes a poetic reply - I'm thrilled - when it is one of your caliber- I'm more than thrilled - Thank you so much Dale- YOU- I will always read - - your approach is so fresh it is always a treat Thank you Paula- I'll bet she does ~G~ Charisma- ~S~ thank you - sincerely - your words mean a lot |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Oops... bump |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I've loved you from afar Over distance, over time Wished for you on every star Wished your love I find sublime' Wonderfully romantic write! I love it! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great composition Bill! There is some great lines in this one...well done my friend!! Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--You express the longing of love so well...and the broom is great...me, I just dance with the air and make my own music. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is beautiful enough to meet any challenge.....a wonderful writing! |
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