Open Poetry #12 |
compensation by paycheck |
jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Spattered blood on the steps, crimson evidence of last night's pain. Respect walked around instead of on. Lateforwork tried not to think of cold cement where someone sat and bled, someone, sat and cried. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I hope it's a big check...very interesting indeed! Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
another i don't feel is quite stable...but can't do any more for it...thanks you comments help it feel a little less shaky |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
We're all guilty of getting caught up in our own problems, sparing only a "what a shame" when evidence of worse is thrust in our path... while deep inside, the thought that "there, but for grace, go I" automatically guides our footsteps around the stains. Not one of your easier ones... but thought provoking! *S* |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
suthern?? if anyone asks for an interpretation of my poems, can i just send them your email...you always read them just the way i meant them to be, but somehow you make them make sense, and i just write poetry...thank you my friend |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I agree with you jellybean, I could sense a powerful message that could only hit me and stun me without really understanding. Suthern certainly cleared it up. What I think though is that you need not change the poem but rather that I become more intuitive like suthern. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
VAS thank you, I know this one was sorta hard to understand, I tried several rewrites in a critique forum, but ended up back with my original.....thank you for the read |
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