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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Oh the old man is dying and the years have lost heir glow His thoughts all creep into view about the days of old. The night is red and the truth is dead and his time is spinning slow. And in the travels of time he seems like a tourist. His fears are more than hope would stop as he humbles with bequeath. There are frozen faces everywhere but no one knows his keep. Oh his hassle is with the long way before the coming bitter end. And in the travels of time he seems like a tourist. And in the final darkness he'll face whatever comes his way. His destiny will surround him as upon his knees he prays And he marvels how it happened that the love has flown away. And in the travels of time he seems like a tourist. And as everyone was speaking a vision came so clear Amoung the heaven's clouds he could see a smile so dear And a voice came from the mountains of the long forgotten years and in the travels of time he was still a tourist. Oh he clutched at the images and he called out her sweet name And he could hear the magic sound of her soft spoken ways. There was her loving voice calling from the fields of their plowed ground and in the travels of time he was a special tourist. With a feeble cry the old man trys to touch her silky cheeks The children long for another dawn but the old man seeks her peace And for the old and trembling father the clock will turn no more and in the travels of time home comes the tourist. Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can feel the Grandfather's clock coming to a stop in this one Ethome....well done Sir...very well done.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And in the final darkness he'll face whatever comes his way. His destiny will surround him as upon his knees he prays And he marvels how it happened that the love has flown away. And in the travels of time he seems like a tourist. And as everyone was speaking a vision came so clear Amoung the heaven's clouds he could see a smile so dear And a voice came from the mountains of the long forgotten years and in the travels of time he was still a tourist. Oh he clutched at the images and he called out her sweet name And he could hear the magic sound of her soft spoken ways. There was her loving voice calling from the fields of their plowed ground and in the travels of time he was a special tourist. ================ Could you be any cooler ... could your rhyme be any more divine... could your cadence and meter be any more melodic .. your so cool I gotta wear shades to read ya  awesome writing E-babes... outstanding.. keep em coming ... you know the one  (when your ready-of course)...Im patient Tomorrow holds only mystery And who's to say what might be But in you I've found a love so strong The sun and the moon look on in jealousy ~VH~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so very much Karilea I appreciate your input and as always it's so very good to hear from you.......ethome Janet thank you so much for the cool words and the fine compliments. I think you already know that I respect your work so much and your friendship is the icing on the poetic cake...thanks again....ethome Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this one reminded me of my Grandfather. . . well done. . . and thank you. . . ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
This is nicely done, not what I expected from the title, but maybe that's because I have been a tourist in your beautiful province so many times. (I'm about 20 minutes from Perth-Andover.) I enjoyed the way you structured it, and of course the message is wonderful, too.To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
The yearning and the need in this just drew me in deep...and such a beatiful ending |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Now you mention it ethome..i guess we are all tourists passing thru this world..nicely done...beautifully written.. ~V~ Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. Pablo Picasso |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Sven I appreciate you taking the time to drop in and read this....glad it reminded you. Thank you Kcsgrandma. It's good to know there is someone familiar with good old N.B. I attended my first grade of school in Perth Andover and I was brought up for the first six years of my life in Aroostock Jnct. Thanks once again for your comments. Thank you Paula for the kind words and I'm glad you liked the ending...take care... ethome |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--This is so wonderfully done...I sure do like the way you write...and the heart that you write with. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i like this yuh woah stop my clock o yuh You know the "Never Ending Story"? They're still telling it! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Victoria for the tourist comment and for reading. Thanks Martie for the wonderful thoughts I really appreciate them right from the bottom of my heart....take care....... Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Walt yuh must have snuck in on me...thanks for the comment I appreciate it so much...take care ethome Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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