Open Poetry #12 |
Inside the Shell |
nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Inside the Shell Like a tortoise, pulling it's head within the shell of it's home, she resides inside her mind of thoughts, that surround and spin each day a bit wearier, from tears that reign, cried. Not understood, though they say they do comforted not, by written words heard lonely and empty, echoes her blue where verses align with " in-betweens" blurred. What matters does not, what is wasn't ever tomorrows get further, and further away stays Yet the past isn't gone, and the day is forever No exit in sight, she is lost, in her maze. She backtracks, her mindsteps, inside empty shell In heart of her home, where her Sometimes Thoughts dwell. ~Wynter *inspired by Indigo "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 02-07-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
yes, yes, this is hard-hitting, Wynter, very much! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
She backtracks, her mindsteps, inside empty shell In heart of her home, where her Sometimes Thoughts dwell. wow...very powerful ending to a very touching poem...love this...sigh...guess i am in my own shell too, but you said it so well |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Kathleen, thank you for your morning response, awhile ago I read this response to my Sometimes Thoughts elsewhere: "The shell of a home is not all that different than the shell of a heart" and her words inspired me to write (when I hadn't planned on it).... jellyb, well we are all in some kind of shell trying to break out or we wouldn't be on here, I don't think...huggzz ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 02-07-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very interesting thoughts Wynter! I really like the wording that you are using to make your point they really stimulate the sadness of the work....thanks ethome. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
E, thanks to stimulate anything is a delight today *s..I didn't say that did I..must be that Moonchild again coming through ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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