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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Shadow My sleep is laden by your hovering ghost, layers of conjured thought, a painting of pain in agonizing patterns of flesh colored streaks. Fragmented face, a rectangular prism - collage of cubes with eyes on all sides. You point to death, show me its ugliness, and dare me to look. © 2001 Corinne Bailey |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, I won't sleep tonight, that's for sure! Well done Corinne... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Feel free to come on over to Dark any time you want...lol... chilling stuff, Corinne...  K |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
A Picasso kind of dream and chilling besides. Rare that I can capture a dream long enough to transcribe it . . . Thanks |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Really nice imagery in this. You captured this wonderfully! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wow, Love this one Corinne, kind of Mary Shelley on acid, its great, thanks for posting. Regards, Olias |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I like it Cor.  Thats really all I can say about any of your work because I haven't found anything that needs improving yet. This is one of my favorites. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Fabulous imagery. I could go for a few more lines "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Corinne, Your words conjure unique visions to mind. Excellent writing. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
To achieve such an impact with such brevity is to be applauded and admired. Rather disturbing in a nightmarish way. Great poem, Corinne! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Sunshine! Severn - I shall come over to Dark and pay a visit, thanks! Thank you, Krawdad, I was aiming for Picasso, so wonderful of you to see it! Dreamkeeper, thank you! Olias, what a cool description, thank you! Temptress, thank you, so wonderful to see your name, brings back a lot of memories! Kathleen, thank you! Poeminister, thank you! Trew, such a wonderful response, thank you very much! Corinne |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I've no idea where this came from - but then I liked Picasso's Blue Period (he lost me when he went abstract) nevertheless - I can't ignore such a beautifully crafted piece = Well done m'lady |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This came from dreams about someone I care deeply about who very ill and cannot be reached or helped. I've always seen him fragmented, so a cubist period came to mind, he's also an artist, so it seemed fitting. Corinne |
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