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When She Dances
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When She Dances |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Hey folks... sorry I aint (or should I say aresent?) around too much these days or nights but.. I actually wrote something... thought I'd drop by for a drive by... huggszzzzz all.. oh... the poem: without further adieu: really -- nor more messing round: this is it right here: When she dances present stands in stillness of giant sequoias stretching from sky eternal to tender soul timeless the dancing hands of my watch beat double when she dances but I am in the duration of the dance baptized born again each tick a sin rolled back and bathed in amber tresses I am not any more than any man nor any less hers, I am when she dances When she smiles the passing years retire in the solitude of amber eyes pervasive, wise a welcome sight her smile When she touches guileless flesh turns guilty knees to knees to fingertips on dancing thighs She speaks and strains of serenity spill from amber lips to eager ears replenishing my empty soul a sigh a laugh and hello turns to valediction again too soon but still she dances in my heart in my soul she whispers in my mind she smiles and so do I |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Aye she sounds like someone special lad LOVE IS GOD, LOVE IS WAR, LOVE IS WHAT YOUR LIFE IS FOR. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Very nice, She is a special lady by the sounds of things she hold a place in your heart  Julie |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Definitely got your attention, she does. Enjoyed this...bet she did (or will) too! jwesley |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN? lol...you have been missed. Glad to see ya back tho...this is great, and anytime? You "DO KNOW THE RULE"? should it mention, serene, serenity, etc...IT BELONGS TO ME. ROFL... welcome home, i hope. HUGS |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
nice to see you... amber? hazel? brown on the surround of eyelids dreaming, voices drift by time unseaming, passioned on a single phrase, poetry is our amaze, the dance of words upon a stage..... a whispering of sighs lost in the whys and laughs and half caraffs of empty wine. such is the narrow on the brink of time's remiss. to you, no wings can sanctify the eyes not seen with hues in blend of that or this........ (sorry, i rambled... it's just me....  .... your poem is awesome....hope all is well with you.. good to see you again ) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
wellllll.... thank you all... it's very nice to be welcomed back... glad you liked it..you're too kind.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hey sweets, it's great to have you drive by, I always love it when you do that |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'timeless the dancing hands of my watch beat double when she dances' Great lines! I love this! sp  ...if I ride these dreams to the Irish Sea, oh, even there, I know your heart rides with me... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rebel--Always enjoy reading your poetry...and this is no exception. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
It is too good to see you post again! Love that velvet style of yours. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LocalRebel~ This just flows with beauty. WOW ! It is so nice to have you here with such a gift as this. Can ya' tell, I LIKE IT ? I do ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
LR~ beautiful!! this simply just floats... so serene and amazingly written-- def going into my library!! take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Reb, I missed you....and now I remember why. Welcome back! write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
whatever you write about, you do it well, this is no exception, nice work |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When I dance The glassware rumbles As I stumble From place to place With lack of grace. When I sing Neighborhood dogs howl And my cats yowl Causing a riot As they pray for quiet. What? Your poem wasn't about me? *G* Never mind, then... I won't even tell you it's great. *G* Welcome back, leather feathers. *S* |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Awesome.... |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Wooo! Bewitched, bothered and bewildered! One powerful lady, and a lucky man to have been inspired by her! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Great writing REBEL... I enjoyed reading your poem... And it's also nice to see you're back again... coco |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
sorry for the late reply... but just wanted to say thank you one and all... it was a nice dream... |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Local Rebel, Wonderful poetry here and its so nice to see you again, ride in any time we love to see ya. Love, Cerenity |
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