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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Traces on an early morn time of birth, time of born the mother gave, the father lifted and in child's smile, they were gifted traces on the heart baby's hand, fingers curled mom's face greets, dad's heart unfurled all in the sweet smile of baby girl now, to go give life a whirl traces on the heart time is shadow, grace is light sunbeams cast the shadows aside babe to child to young woman sweet mom is proud, dad's full complete traces on the heart history touches, makes replete round and round the circle meets young woman to woman grown held then some babes of her own traces on the heart one love, didn't last second love, gone and past not to surrender to love again? when so much love lies there within? traces on the heart face coming age, grace the stage lift all gentle spirits, quell within the rage close a door one day, then follow the light that one true love comes, deep within the night traces on the heart in early mist, time now worn comes soft death, time of mourn she gave her best, all were lifted and in her smile, they were gifted traces on the heart 02.03.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Lovely Traces on the heart, Karilea!  |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful story of a woman's life. Your writing has be so consistantly good the last six months you amaze me! |
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Agent696_DS Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 33NY, USA |
This is a nice I liked it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, This left some traces on me. *L* |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
heartbreakingly beautiful |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Denise, I am so very pleased that you liked this, thank you... PdV, I can humbly say, thank you... and thank you, Agent 696... Sy, when you respond, I know it's special, thank you, {~,^} Mr. Yeats, that, Sir, I will take to the bank, thank you... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Nicely done. Brought some wafting memories. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
an excellent summation of life, Sunshine.... |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Touching.........beautifully expressed.........  -SEA |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marge, 'Deer, SEA...thank you all... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sunshine, you always delight me when I read your poetry... This one brought tears to my eyes half way thru I kinda felt something building up and this I compliment you on tugging at the heartstrings in your writing like you do... Lovely read for me and I thank you... ~coco~ You get a lot more lesson mileage when you lose in some situations than always win... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, this is truly outstanding love. Traces in the heart, well, mine certainly has Kari traced into it. Absolutely wonderful. I loved this one of yours love, it is beauty and grace and I will keep it as long as time itself. Take care love as always Majestic Marsha I really do love this one  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Coco dear, your comment lends belief in myself....thank you so very much.... Marsha, I am so very glad that you like this one....If I can continue to grace your life, it's nice to know.... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I love the word "traces" I loved this. "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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