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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Borrowing to Give lend to me just one line lend to me just one line let me make it mine, all mine let me make it mine, all mine then let me lend it back to you and see with it what you'll do for I am sure as sure as I be you'll give it back to marvel me I gave away a line or two then one gave one back to me 'tho now remorseful here I stand for I let it slip right through my hand not even did I put the ink in the pen now wonder if I shall hear it again something about a mirror, and how it hit a head it did, broke apart in wit for all the conversant sages I've met their lines come flowing, leave me wet in sound of surf, in rain, in tears yet they guide me, loose my fears lend to me just one line lend to me just one line let me make it mine, all mine let me make it mine, all mine I share and share, then share again to care, I dare, then share care again and listen to a promise, tho ask not when a muse keeps its promise, I'll know it then there is a friend out there in the lands said "now there's a line, take a stand" but the line broke, on gossamer string was held I hope she finds it again, come to me and weld back the lines in my mind that I can't find for I took a moment to sleep, unwind, now I find that upon awakening, I'm blind and suffer regret, for a line I can't find… lend to me just one line lend to me just one line let me make it mine, all mine let me make it mine, all mine and if you cannot lend me a line not even for a little while… then just take one of mine and weave it into a smile for if I cannot read one of mine then I'll read yours, and be fine…. 02.03.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
there is a friend out there in the lands said "now there's a line, take a stand" but the line broke, on gossamer string was held I hope she finds it again, come to me and weld back the lines in my mind that I can't find for I took a moment to sleep, unwind, now I find that upon awakening, I'm blind and suffer regret, for a line I can't find… lend to me just one line lend to me just one line let me make it mine, all mine let me make it mine, all mine and if you cannot lend me a line not even for a little while… then just take one of mine and weave it into a smile for if I cannot read one of mine then I'll read yours, and be fine…. ============== YES!!!! EXACTLY .... exactly poetess of Sun and wisdom and you know... this is way cool ... and you know... tis in me library now too me thanks you for the "lend"  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunshine, you can borrow any or all of my lines, but here are some that are a gift: a line that's a promise of enduring might arises from pen as eagles in flight so Sunshine might borrow an unchained mystery with hope for tomorrow a setting soul's free soft on her pillow these words I will write so as she dreams she'll hear them tonight. Her words have a power that goes with her song so borrow my words please take anyone and when you write them and let them go free if they are willing they return unto me. Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
There are quite a few of your lines I'd like to borrow.....in fact, I'd like to 'borrow' them all! I can?!! Wow!! Thanks, Karilea!! Do you have an eraser? I have lots and lots of erasing to do, what with changing all the author's names from Sunshine to Denise....hehehehe Another lovely poem, Karilea! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
another keeper ~S~ - dam you write well - |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, I won't borrow to give back because you craft your words so perfectly. But sometimes you let a word or two drop. And when you do I pick them up and use those, which is where at least two of my recent scribbles have come from. Thank you for those dear heart. This is utterly wonderful and you have produced another of your pure golden shining beauties. I love it, as I always do, and that is honest and true. (Is it thoughtful I don't know love is it?) Kari will always be the biz as far as I'm concerned) Wonderfully written, beautifully constructed and a delight Thank you love Take care as always love Majestic, word borrowing, puckish, Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
hey, karilea... this was really cool! and i just wanted you to know that you can feel free to borrow a words from my mouth any time at all~! you've loaned me a few, y'know? ((hugs)).... i mean, if ya really wanna! thing is, who would want to quote from this drivel... LOL... but anyway, i enjoyed this much and i sure know how it feels to lose a line or two... many times i wake up and i'm still half asleep and i have what i think is a really good verse just flowing in my head somewhere and then when i get up to go write it down? poof! gone! god, i hate it when that happens... ... this poem of yours flows, girl! you've got some kinda muse going lately.... pouring them out one after the other and they're all really good.... you make me proud to know you, ms poetess!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ms. Marie, I love it when I'm libraried....thank you SO much for inspiring this little gem....but darn if I can remember now the exact line you used....part of it is in there somewhere....if you can find it, you can borrow it back....LOL.... Kethry, sweets, thank you so much....I believe I will.... Denise, I use my delete key and/or whiteout, which can explain a lot....lol....thank you!.... Mr. Yeats, thank you for the emphatic "good"...{~,^} Marsha, as long as you don't trip on any of the marbles that I lose....and as far as those loose words?...you've done QUITE well with them, thank you!... doreen....there's about 4,000 muses out here, and a few favored ones that really keep me up at night, and during the day, and no naps in the afternoon....so I'm very glad you're enjoying these, Ms. Poetperfect! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
what a generous spirit! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Nice of you to share so much of yourself with us all. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
you don't need lines, Sunshine...you've got them all....;_ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kathleen...my folks raised me right... Marge...see above.... 'Deer...no, I don't, you do, I think, as many others....you all inspire me so much...it is hard to put it into words [see, I'll never be a real poet]...but do know, I try....because of this desire...I try very, very hard...every day... you are all so very wonderful...what a gift PiP is.... |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I like this. Nicely put. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Poeminister....very much... |
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