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Crawl back into your hole...
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Crawl back into your hole... |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Email from an ex last night...dredging up some old feelings...(delete, delete, delete) I did not respond...instead a face-lift of some old dark thoughts... Serpent in my mind... Your eyes drew me warm and alive with wooly mischief captivatingly dark with the concealment of buried consequences for a moment they reflected me and in that moment I was foolishly drawn by a free spirit drifting momentarily through my life pausing long enough to alter everything I knew a wily serpent hissing your charms in my ear tempting me to taste of you seducing me with tongue flickers I once breathed your name my hallucinations intricated with your face you were everything and I...your addict stripped of everything My soul My dignity and finally...my mind used up insipid imagery within a cracked mirror you slithered away with my sanity tiny shards of me embedded in your retreating belly... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yesssssssss...... I can't begin to tell you how perfectly timed this one is, and you expressed some thoughts that I couldn't find words for!! What a great write, Breathe....  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No wonder your name suits you...for you will breathe life into many a soul 'round here... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
through my past and now my knowledge, I will gain....and once again where I wiltered I will shine This is the last lines I wrote in a poem about the same subject Sweetie I know what you're going through and it is very dark and lonely but there is a light believe me. You have penned this emotion extremely well...well penned ~HUGS~ Tracie~  < !signature-->Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
(APPLAUDS) WOW!!!! You go girl!! This is a great write, loved the images in it. Well done  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I can feel it...James |
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Loki New Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 4 |
Very powerful, Edgy as an Alanis Morisette song but more articulate; nery nice. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Breathe~ This is great! Love the snake thread. Neat word choices, allusions and illusions. (I might be reading in a couple you didn't intend, but that's ok.) /:^)== =#== |
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