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everhome (a duet with Paula)
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everhome (a duet with Paula) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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tiny, beating things of grace neverending finite space delicate, as fine spun lace-- this is my heart in think of you. as the echo ever dwells longing that belongs to hell release of you--I wish you well and yearn you live...and then die too. Set me free! Let me live... a beating heart not yours to give another's wish for me, forgive-- I do not wish to die like this. Love me! with a heartbeat wild... in honesty of loving child I do not want a love that's mild-- sera me, unto my soul. Oh, but I would grant you breath another gasp to stave of death in ponder of what I have left- I fear that I grow cold. So warm me now in sweet embrace, let me feel your hands in trace my beating heart--in this-our place... take me ever, everhome. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh Im so digging this... and Im never gonna get to bed with all the awesome poetry popping up... this is way cool you two... your styles melded in perfect unison love the rhyming phrases. way cool me girlies...way  If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
incredibly rich in cadence, meter, emotion and unity.... i loved it! ya'll are quite a team, y'know that??? fabulous! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*sigh*.....wish this was written by me...or FOR me... *sigh*...I simply love it. Hmm...constructive critiques? Ok..always start with a solid concrete foundation slab and be sure your footings are secured..OH.. I thought it said construction critiques! LOL |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
It is an honour and a pleasure to write with you and I hope to be able to do more in the future...Thanks and HUGS |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
K and Paula, this is like new dialect... tiny, beating things of grace ~ this is my heart in think of you. ~ sera me, unto my soul. ~ let me feel your hands in trace .. so soft I can't repeat the words that come to mind. Which is a true pity, because they whisper wonders. One word I'll steal from english: exquisite. Janet may not get to sleep, but I swear, this will creep in my dreams tonight. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Fabulous!!! " I have seen without perceiving I have been another man Let me pierce the realm of glamour So I know just what I am"....Dweller on the Threshold, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Much grat to all muchly...but Paula? THANK YOU. Was fun, and I DO thank you...you, honor ME, and I thank you much!!!! Was great fun, let's do it again soon? HUGS |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Loud applause...standing ovation...more, we must have more.. Truly a fantastic combination. Sandra |
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