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3 "not quite" haikus
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3 "not quite" haikus |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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(scribbled on my "lifepad" while at a "poetry craft" session today with John Calvin Rezmerski . . . and scanning the crowd far and near) focused on shadow hidden beneath her long brown The dream girl again all the young women so near yet so out of touch My age relative she writes long blue notes and doodles some inbetween Her zippered notebook /:^)== =#== |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
I definately can relate to the third one. I believe these are called Senryus because they are not about nature. But nevertheless, they are more than special. Thanks for the reads. -Jeremy Raulinaitis "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Amateur you may be but these are great...they are senyrus instead of haikus...LOL Marge was kind enough to tell me the difference...and they are an addicting way to write...more please |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
 You have observed well. And these are addicting. Keep them coming.To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Thanks for visiting, jeremy, Paula & Marilyn. I spent a year focusing on the haiku/senryu form almost to the exclusion of anything else and I think I warped my brain a bit. I find myself thinking in this form now. Eerie sometimes. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Like them very much, Krawdad, they are senyrus, but they're certainly about human nature. Good ones, good snapshots. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
The image is "johnny on the spot" Melton Good job |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Krawdad, I'll bet even you dreams are poetic, loved these. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
loved reading these senryu's......its a great form to right. take care Charisma |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
VAS, 2dalimit, Kethry, Charisma, Glad you enjoyed these "little ones". They are great fun to do. I think I like them because they are so visual and yet something more than that and in such little space, you've got to be brutally honest. Kraw' |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
just testing folder color function (haven't see anything but "manila" so far) |
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